This poem is excellent (as: This poem is excellent (as yours always are), and that final stanza is a real powerhouse. It reminded me of the dry bones' song in T. S. Eliot's poem, Ash Wednesday. And any poem that can remind me of his great achievement is a wonderful poem, indeed.
That final line must have, in: That final line must have, in some form, heard by Bolshevik Lenin when he ordered the execution of Russia's royal family; and by the Bavarian housepainter when he was appointed chancellor of Germany in January, 1933.
Wow: Wow Redbrick thank you so much for the wonderful feedback. A relationship is fun bu the break up is definitely hard especially when those memories fade.
Your song-like poem captures: Your song-like poem captures heartbreak in such a raw, straightforward way. The struggle to “turn off” love feels so real here. I especially felt the line about the hardest part being “the time you spent to miss,” because it shows how love lingers in memory even when the relationship is gone.
I’m overjoyed that you found: I’m overjoyed that you found some comfort in my expression and that you, so generously, took the time to dive deep with exquisite and precise insights. Coming from you that’s a coveted gift.
I’m still praying for your wellbeing and wishing you the very best of everything. You are a beacon.
The superlative profundity of: The superlative profundity of your poetic vision and verbal skill are well on display in this remarkable poem.. I am always awasg in waves of awe when I read your poetry.
This poe can be considered: This poe can be considered spiritual survival 101. Writing this comment from the twists and turns of a bad patch right now, I can look again to Hope after reading this poem. That, alone, proves its legitimacy as a masterpiece. I have missed Patricia's presence on this site, recently, and so the appearance of this poem is an event which carries several levels of impotance.
The poem's logical progress occurs in three sections. In the first, or Bonsai, section, the poem describes and laments "the artificiality" of existence that the present state of society forces on to us. After describing what a Bonsai existence is, she brilliantly locates its cause in the loss of the sight, due to cloudiness, of the starfields. This then leads into what I would call the Starfield section. Even as her perspective on the Cosmos experences a shrinkage, or drawing back, that the perspective will open again and briing back everything that is both beautiful and lasting; and this activates the last section of the poem, which can be called the Lasting Beautiful. She realizes that the Lasting Beautiful can be attained again because she has never left God; and that is because God will never foresake her, as the great Hebrews epistile in the Bible declares. And at that point, the poem ends, with that triumphant orchestral cadence of the final line.
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