Hmmm? I get Shakespearea: Hmmm? I get Shakespearea vibes.... Very easy to punch CTRL/ALT/DEL, yes. Perhaps a little to easy? Very ... laconic imagery!
With a bare bodkin? who would fardels bear,
To grunt and sweat under a weary life,
But that the dread of something after death,
The undiscover'd country from whose bourn
No traveller returns, puzzles the will
And makes us rather bear those ills we have
Than fly to others that we know not of?
(Hamlet Act 3, Scene 1)
Yep. Is it working? Using a: Yep. Is it working? Using a new world order different but the same as the old new world order. A league of extraordinary gentlemen... hint hint...
Almost there... such great: Almost there... such great imagery and metaphor the structure begs for eleoqunce but, it gets caught on emotionalism and luckily it wins out. Something reL special here .
Thank you so much for that. : Thank you so much for that. I needed to write the sijo because Beauty is Beauty, whether among the stars or among the K-Pop boybands, and Poets' chief vocation---to be the Cosmos' voice as it explains itself to itself---includes declarations of Beauty. And, if there is some young man whose given nature is like mine, perhaps the poem will help him embrace, rather than fear, his attractions.
Here, love meets the dance of: Here, love meets the dance of galaxies in your poetic craftsmanship. And it's magic. I'm hearing it and seeing it and simply reveling in the journey. One of your best!