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S74rw4rd-13d commented on: Late On The Night Of January 21st, 1924 by S74rw4rd-13d 11 weeks 3 days ago
That line, "But I cannot: That line, "But I cannot forget the other ground, where no flowers bloom, no bells resound. The Romanov children, stripped and slain, their bodies hidden in Siberian rain" has the power of a "suckerpunch" to the gut or kidney.
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S74rw4rd-13d commented on: Late On The Night Of January 21st, 1924 by S74rw4rd-13d 11 weeks 4 days ago
This should be posted as a: This should be posted as a poem, as it is far better than my poem!
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redbrick commented on: Late On The Night Of January 21st, 1924 by S74rw4rd-13d 11 weeks 4 days ago
Wow! And on a corollary: Wow! And on a corollary thought;  A Widow’s Lament in the Age of No Flowers Late on the night of January’s frost, I watched my husband breathe his final cost. They brought him wreathes, they brought him song, they crowned his silence, they called it strong. But I cannot forget the other ground, where no flowers bloom, no bells resound. The Romanov children, stripped and slain, their bodies hidden in Siberian rain. Graveless, cancelled, erased from the page, yet their shadows rise to indict the age. No cenotaph, no marble stone, only whispers where they lie unknown. And I, the widow, dare not tell my comrades of this thought of hell: What if the Faith they sought to kill still tolls its bell, relentless, shrill? For one is celebrated, banners unfurled, while the others are banished from the world. Yet stars above, with hostile light, judge both alike in endless night.  
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redbrick commented on: hearth of language by redbrick 11 weeks 4 days ago
Thanks so much. Still aiming: Thanks so much. Still aiming at getting an entire poem to soar. I understand that's quite the holy grail. When I think of that it may for some be like Frost's "nothing gold can stay."
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redbrick commented on: Poem true. Names changed? Check Webb by Teytonon 11 weeks 4 days ago
Sounds like the web of: Sounds like the web of Dragnet. Another Jack was a medical examiner, Klugman from Quincy, M.E. 
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redbrick commented on: cerulean chasm by redbrick 11 weeks 4 days ago
I've seen that a long time: I've seen that a long time ago, might have to rewatch it
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Teytonon commented on: cerulean chasm by redbrick 12 weeks 2 days ago
You certainly have the skills..: You certainly have the skills to produce a great poem That's something I've always felt Not like the producer Max Bialystock, you know him ?  He wears a cardboard belt! Thanks for posting  
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S74rw4rd-13d commented on: hearth of language by redbrick 12 weeks 2 days ago
The poem is beautiful, but: The poem is beautiful, but the final two lines soar beyond the usual powers of language.
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S74rw4rd-13d commented on: Wildflower by Seeker 12 weeks 2 days ago
Beautiful!: Beautiful!
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dis_konnected commented on: leaks by dis_konnected 12 weeks 4 days ago
Thanks: Thanks
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J-C4113d commented on: loveless by Jesster 12 weeks 6 days ago
That is sooooo true.: That is sooooo true.
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redbrick commented on: senior formal (prom) by redbrick 13 weeks 2 hours ago
We just had a graduation this: We just had a graduation this year and that stirred the Muse up a bit. 
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redbrick commented on: more than scribbles by redbrick 13 weeks 2 hours ago
Thank you kindly, that is: Thank you kindly, that is most affirming to know 
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redbrick commented on: sleeping with fishes by redbrick 13 weeks 2 hours ago
Yup, Spanish pescado or pesce: Yup, Spanish pescado or pesce and English Pisces 
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Teytonon commented on: sleeping with fishes by redbrick 13 weeks 4 hours ago
Well done! I enjoyed..: Well done! I enjoyed reading this very much. If I may addJoe was a man who wished to sleep with fish Loved the way they looked, one look, got hooked Go anywhere to meet 'em, didn't work out? He'd eat 'em After three days they'd be gone, no longer fresh, he Should know his fish, his name? Joe Pesci    
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