Your precise depth of: Your precise depth of bolstering the boulder boldly in both worlds, palpitations of heart prowess, and firm divergence, gaping gateways, like splitting gaps through history!
From my experience, moving: From my experience, moving forward took a helical sort of trajectory which is quite interesting in itself. Spiralling forward?
Thank you. I had to wait: Thank you. I had to wait until old age to learn the difference between a straight (no pun intended) line and an orbit. My parents were obsessed with guaging my development as "forward" and "backwards," and very often embarrased me in front of visiting relatives by declaring that I had been "moving backward" again. However, at this age, I am more free of their pernicious attitudes than I have ever been, and the forward orbital rather than their "straight" lines is an implied aspect of my screen name that I had not realized earlier. Your poems have helped to that, and thus have been tremendous blessings to me in this final segment of the course.
What I realise about the: What I realise about the exercise now is that putting more time and effort has shifted the results. Still far off toward that mastery.
You already know that I love: You already know that I love astronomical poems . . . so this one is a tremendous blessing. After reading it, I was so smitten by admiration that I needed to lean back in my chair and just let the poem wash over me. My enjoyment of your poems proves, I believe, that there is a circularity to life: reading your poem transports me into that starlit realm I first entered during my adolescence. Your poems do not take me "back" to that time; they take me forward to it, because the path is not linear but orbital.
Queenie’s addition really: Queenie’s addition really changes the energy; she turns the piece from a solitary, brooding monologue into a grotesque little carnival. I like how her bitter, theatrical voice contrasts with the narrator’s solemn tone, almost like madness stepping out into the open.
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