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About A boy and a girl
Heartache, pain
I'm freezing my buns off in this pouring rain
I keep playing the conversation back in my head over and over again
wondering how things started.
the beginning, the middle , and the end.
Now that things are over and its far from when we met last October.
I couldn't be anymore aware of what I missed out on while you were still there.
Sorry this is not a story about changing the world.
its just a story about a boy and girl who fell in love.
Then they fell apart.
their love became cold and so dud their hearts.
I think it a shame that the
I think it a shame that the poem ended on such a isolating note; both suffering indifference and their hearts becoming cold. I would like a more romantic ending; I think the reader of your poem gains experience of their own imagination, comparing the poem to some of their own experiences in love or just a relationship.tovelofan 1.
http://www.postpoems.org/authours/a.griffiths57
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Is a great way to write a prose poem. Plain, simple, okay (as in far from sucky) - no devices clogging the works, just all you and the way your brain puts ideas together - original - Lady A
Thanks for the feedback :)
Thanks for the feedback :)