If You Were My Everything

If you were a song, you would be the most harmonious.

If you were a flower, you would be a field of roses.

If you were an ocean, I would be a fisherman.

If you were a rock, you would be a gem.

If you were a memory, you would be unforgettable.

If you were a bird, you could soar to heights not seen.

If you were the night, I would be the dawn

If you were a flame, you would be eternal.

If you were a shoe, it would only be fit for a King.

If you were a breath, you would be the wind.

If you were a cloth, I would sow you to my heart.

If you were a gift, I could never stop praising the Sender.

And, if you were mine, I would love you forever.

 

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rays_no_poet's picture

<3

This is exacly my kind of poem.  I love all of yours that you have posted.  I had a feeling the last two lines would end it perfectly and they did not disappoint.  10/10

hopelessly-candid's picture

thank you so much!!! :)

thank you so much!!! :)

millyardo's picture

excellient job . this poems

excellient job . this poems is it own

hopelessly-candid's picture

thank you!! i rly appreciate

thank you!! i rly appreciate it!!! :)

Beatnik1979's picture

great structure, even greater meaning

Real poetry captures the readers attention, makes them feel something, and this is indeed real poetry. Besides the obvious excellent choice- of-word.....the lay out and structure make this a win. Well done

hopelessly-candid's picture

wow thank you so much....i

wow thank you so much....i tend to stuggle with whether or not my poetry is good enough so i really appreciate that :)

PeterChristopherRaymond's picture

I love it! Especially the

I love it! Especially the last two lines. They're such beautiful promises to a loved one.

hopelessly-candid's picture

Aw thank you so much.... I

Aw thank you so much.... I wrote this for someone I promised to always love

Morningglory's picture

That's absolutely beautiful.

That's absolutely beautiful. Love it!


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hopelessly-candid's picture

Thank u so much :)!!.... p.s.

Thank u so much :)!!.... p.s. I love ur poems!!!

Morningglory's picture

:) Thanks!!! :)

:) Thanks!!! :)


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TrevorCraig81's picture

great job

I love your poem, going through exaclty what you described right now.

hopelessly-candid's picture

awww thank you so much i rly

awww thank you so much i rly appreciate it.... cheers to love ;)

TrevorCraig81's picture

no problem

no problem, haha well toast to love a little later, still waiting to see 

hopelessly-candid's picture

Lol ik how u feel and good

Lol ik how u feel and good luck :)