I take love for granted

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I saw Frida on your birthday and feel in-love with a man for a night

Woke up beside a valued friend and forgot to call and say I love you

A month later I carried your body past a forty foot long honour guard to a grave etching your name in the snow

Today I had no paper and too many thoughts

So I opened my planner and used the blackened days

And found Frida and your birthday

And the fact I didn’t call

 

 

                                                                                                            

 

 

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I need a new title for this

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SSmoothie's picture

I pick this one rwr for your

I pick this one rwr for your thingy love it! 


Don't let any one shake your dream stars from your eyes, lest your soul Come away with them! -SS    

"Well, it's life SIMS, but not as we know it" - ¡$&am

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:)

thanks I do too

not sure if I submitted it or not but I think it didn't make the list :(


Much Love

Ashley

nightlight1220's picture

Life is full of compromises.

Life is full of compromises. We learn as we go along. I am more interested from this in what Frida would say and what her karma is. She may not have cared much or may have cared a lot, but in the end, it's all water under the bridge. I'm glad friendships and love are based on spiritual truth and not a stone in a graveyard, aren't you?

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...and he asked her, "do you write poetry? Because I feel as if I am the ink that flows from your quill."

"No", she replied, "but I have experienced it. "

 

running_with_rabbits's picture

Death is also full of compromises...

Man I never thought of it that way now I want to knwo what she would say. It really could go either way. I could see her being compasisonate and cold....

 

I'm glad for many things, one of them is that my friendships tend to be baised on love and spiritual truth yes :) 

 

I like your quote btw, "do you write poetry.." "No, but I have experienced it"..... I may start replying as such when people ask me if I write ;)


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Ashley

a.griffiths57's picture

I take love for granted:

 

 

Oh! what soul searching after the death of a loved one. One you may have treated better, or been more faithful too. Powerfully haunting quality to this poem. I enjoyed this read with interest.


 

 

http://www.postpoems.org/authours/a.griffiths57

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:)

Thanks for your kind words. It was more like a loved one I didn't even realised I loved...if that makes sense.Glad you enjoyed it. 


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Ashley

INKSTAIN's picture

Really very powerful. I need

Really very powerful. I need to call a close friend and soon, they are not well. Thank you for the very affecting reminder. I need to be there for some wonderful people who were there for me. I need to make time. Very  Well written. 

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:)

thank you for learning from my mistakes ;)

 

sorry to hear you have a friend in bad shape :(


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Ashley

Beavis's picture

Love the poem

I think the title is fine, but it also isn't a Rabbit title. I know you aren't a fan of using a line for a title, but this line really hit me, and all things considered..."I had no paper and too many thoughts"

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<3

I don't know the more I sit with it the more I feel it is a rabbits title...smoothie converted me...think about it for a bit. my titles are always another layer to the poem, often they are blunt, crude, or witty, but someitmes they are just subtle or obvious, the main point is they add another layer to the poem. Why did I have too many thoughts? what was making me write so much? who was I thinking about so desperately that I dug out my day planner and wrote poems around the crossed off plans? it clealry wasn't the dead uncle, he wasn't in my mind until I used enough pages to get to his birthday....he stumbled upon my thoughts which gave me an epiphony...I take love for granteed. I wrote that as a comment to myself at the bottom of the poem. I had nothign else to use for a title and wanted to post it so I used it and figured I would change it later...but....who's love was making me write in the first place and was I also taking it for granteed?

 

its a very rabbits title after borrowing smoothie's eyes ;0

 

Love ya more than poems

HUGS


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Ashley

SSmoothie's picture

I think the title says it all

I think the title says it all to profoundly well. Don't you dare change it. We've all had our its too late moments and this helps us all to remember to keep them at a minimum. Great heartfelt write. Hugss 


Don't let any one shake your dream stars from your eyes, lest your soul Come away with them! -SS    

"Well, it's life SIMS, but not as we know it" - ¡$&am

running_with_rabbits's picture

:) <3

thanks smoothie! it is always a joy to gain some perspective ;)


Much Love

Ashley