Midnight Breeze

 

I wake to the midnight breeze whistling.

I hear my father snoring in the next room.

Lighting a candle croons to my thoughts,

naked in a starlit kingdom, protected it seems

by elaborate paintings of saints on the walls.

Looking through the frosty window,

there the intoxication of all creation

is caught in a flash and forlorn to the moment,

enhanced by the stillness of the street.

It startles me, and I begin to weep indeed.

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I am not sure if I am

I am not sure if I am misreading, but the poem seems to imply an eerie feeling in the background.  I think the whole poem works well, but it left me---like the best of the ghost stories I have read through the decades---with that uneasy feeling.  I used to get that feeling, too, when I had to eat my mother's cole slaw; and, believe me, your poem is far better than her horrific cole slaw.


Starward-Led [in Chrismation, Januarius]

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Really

I was only trying to create some scene, because while most of my poems are philosophical and borne from invisible ideas I oftentimes despair that i lack the expression of some further elemental certain detailed scenes. I am very glad that you are reading and enjoy my poetry; nice to have your consistent comments.


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The philosophical aspect of

The philosophical aspect of your poems reminds me of some of the best of Pop Stevens, arguably America's greatest Poet in the 20th century.  And I think he---at the height of his poetic career---struck a balance between the philosohical content and the scene; and often the scene is disposed of in his titles (like one of my favorites, "Mountain Covered With Cats"), and then the poem moves very swiftly into its philosophical presentation.  I loomk forward to more of your poetry.


Starward-Led [in Chrismation, Januarius]

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Existence is All We Get

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Born to bourn out of here, the best is between. Weep it but laugh it and smirk or smile, frown or cheer it in between - it is all there is so enjoy. :D

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Wise

Yea probably the wisest thing we can realize


peace, pot, tequila shot

Jesus loves us, stoned or not