Star Child

Are you a star child? 

 Can you make the flowers bloom 
with a wave of your hand?
Do diamonds wonder what it would be like
 to be you?
Do your words linger long
 like waves, 
made to lap the beaches velvet shore
 and rock in its poetic ebb?
Does your gravity pull the 
Moon
Earth
Stars 
Down
 into the infinite orbit of your eyes; 
and when welling a tear,
could they wash away the sea?
 
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allets's picture

"poetic ebb"

"...when welling a tear,/could they wash away the sea?" - Artistic excellence lives in a great ending and this is one great ending. Bravo! Well sculpted poem - Lady A -

 


 

 

Beatnik1979's picture

Your insight is so valuable

Your insight is so valuable to me!

Thank you for giving it a chance!

Miiranda31's picture

*deep breath in, with a grasp

*deep breath in, with a grasp on my exhale*--- wow. this is REALLY nice. 

Beatnik1979's picture

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Thank you for the read!

cathycavalcante's picture

One word came to mind as I

One word came to mind as I finished this delightful piece... "sigh" lol!!

Nicely crafted, poet! :)


 

Beatnik1979's picture

I appreciate your comments,

I appreciate your comments, thank you 

Astral_Tides's picture

I love the vast elegance

I love the vast elegance which resides between the lines of this creation.

Pin-point is the sight that is capable of such goings on.

I relate to them, so has the tone here harmonized well for me.

I find three distinct phases of this which flow in jarring cohesiveness,
creating a memorable experience.

Short, sweet, profound, memorable...

An absolute success from this vantage point.

Bravo sir!

Thanks for sharing : )


"The stars awaken a certain reverence, because though always present, they are inaccessible; but all natural objects make a kindred impression, when the mind is open to their influence." R.W.E.

 


 

Beatnik1979's picture

Thank you for

taking your time to read my poem. There is no greater compliment  than ones sacrifice of time to invest in anothers creative endeavors. You have a unique perspective, and I truly value your review! 

Stardust's picture

nicely crafted. enjoyed it a

nicely crafted. enjoyed it a lot :)

Beatnik1979's picture

Im glad

you enjoyed it. It really is a great compliment coming from you. I really appreciate it, and your time spent reading it. Thank you 

a.griffiths57's picture

    Love your poem it reminds

 

 

Love your poem it reminds me of the 1960's/70's era. Well written and a good and enjoyable read. You are very expressive and descriptive in your work. I liked your poem very much; to loose the stars, the moon and the earth in someones gaze, is trully wonderfull.


 

 

http://www.postpoems.org/authours/a.griffiths57

Beatnik1979's picture

thank you

I read many types of poetry, and some of the best,in my opinion...came out of the 60s. There really WAS a revolution in that era..in art,literature,and culture. Most of the constraints and boundaries were abandoned and some brilliant things were printed not just in books, but in the fabric of humanity. It really has...and will always inspire me. 

LovingLovelace's picture

This is really good and when

This is really good and when read in my head it has a very sway-y motion. A soothing back-and-forth lilt that makes for great whimsical poetry.

But, I do have a question. In the first line it says "a waive of your hand?" In this to you mean to say 'wave of your hand' or am I missing a point here?

My apologies if the second.

Great poem.

Love,
LovingLovelace


If your mirror doesn't find you one of the most beautiful people it has ever seen, punch it and find a better mirror.

Beatnik1979's picture

grammer glitch

Yes, it was a grammatical error on my part and will make that correction! Thanks for keeping a sharp eye! I hope you enjoyed the read minus the grammar- fail! 

hopelessly-candid's picture

Absolutely enchanting..... :)

Absolutely enchanting..... :)