Eden Palace

 Archways pillars marble stone

Winding stairway ancient Throne

 

Torch's light a basement Heathen

poems paint a path through Eden

 

Flicker dance of moonlit candle

Silent Footprint Serpent Sandal

 

Alone are we as one

to be dust in the Balance

may death reduce us to none

A return to the Palace

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a.griffiths57's picture

Eden Palace:

 

 

Like your poem, excellent rhyming and interesting content. When will we create Eden here on earth? Seems to me the more we try the more damage is done to the earth and then us. This poem makes the reader think, so do you think Adam and Eve were actually today's modern human beings?


 

 

http://www.postpoems.org/authours/a.griffiths57

Beatnik1979's picture

My thoughts were

life on earth is damnation..

and we are lost souls bidding for our escape.

poetry  is the vessel that reveals that philosophy.

allets's picture

"Poems paint a path through Eden"

Yeah they do! ~Lady A~

 



~(:D)-

 

cathycavalcante's picture

For lest we fail to obtain

For lest we fail

to obtain the crown

Only to simply remain

King's jester-clown.

 

 

lol...sorry...it popped into my poetic brain and my fingers forced me to press the corresponding keys!! :D ;) lol

Much enjoyed the read, William.

~Cathy


 

Beatnik1979's picture

Yes

it made me smile!

thank you again for your read.

 

cathycavalcante's picture

Hey you...long time no

Hey you...long time no see...nor read. lol Hope all is well, poet. :)

Cathy


 

Beatnik1979's picture

Hey

too long..yeah I’ve been away. im Back now, and It is my chief endeavor to set the world on fire.

 

glad as always to hear from you 

running_with_rabbits's picture

as a whole the poem is well

as a whole the poem is well worded and flows nice but leaves me less than moved emotionally, but the second set of lines is just brilliant!


Much Love

Ashley

Beatnik1979's picture

Thanks for the review

Good feedback is really a difficult thing to find, and yours is appreciated! I hope that this piece has brought you equally as much satisfaction as my writing of it. Your are a well respected poet, and community member and your praise weighs more than you know

 

running_with_rabbits's picture

:)

Good feedback is hard to find these days, we have such a polite society we fear speaking truth of self :/

I firmly believe that on writes to express self and that anything after that is just a blessing, so I hope that this piece fulfilled you and said what you needed it to say :) 

Thank you for your kind words :) 


Much Love

Ashley

Beatnik1979's picture

Thank you

I suppose my thoughts were that

life on earth is damnation..

and we are lost souls bidding for our escape.

through poetry that philosophy may me revealed .

i value your insights.

running_with_rabbits's picture

:( I hope that view shifts

:( I hope that view shifts for you someday...

 

A TV show I was watching said something profound recently, it was a conversation between a gay preist and a gay lawyer, the lawyer was worried he would go to hell because his mother is fairly avangical... the priest said "what if heaven and hell are nothing more than how we are remembered by those who still live" ... what if all our souls need is to be remembered well, spoken of kindly, and matter to someone once we leave this earth?


Much Love

Ashley

Beatnik1979's picture

Yes

its not my creed just a possibility out there ... floating in the breeze.

how will you be remembered?

I know how I will remember you...

& i hope the halo is as light nd shiny as it looks!

 

thanks for revisiting this with me.

 

running_with_rabbits's picture

:) <3 

:) <3 


Much Love

Ashley