The Empty Park

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The park is empty now;

Silence demands your attention

As engrossingly does the noise:

Of over exuberrant shrieks and

Cries pervading the park's confine!

 

Overgrown, swaying in the wind, buttercups;

Cheerily push towards the blue sky.

A swaith of rippling daisies; alongside

The butterups grow reaching for the heavens too.

Many a daisychain made by children, decorates the park.

 

Swings moving in response to the wind.

See-Saw proudly angled high, awaiting

the next children to ride.

The slide solidily stands at the centre of the park:

With as many children climbing up as slides down it.

 

Adventure abounds in the park, as the young ones endeavour;

at this or that or the other, ride

and whilst encouraged to excercise and keepfit.

Some of the parents try; they are anything but fit:

Red face and bountious body masses, "have a go for the kids!".

 

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PeterChristopherRaymond's picture

I love your technique of

I love your technique of personification and the way you play with details. :)

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    Thank you for taking the

 

 

Thank you for taking the time to read my poem, I am pleased you liked my poem, much appreciated.


 

 

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JeanneTX46's picture

The Empy Park

Oh I really like this one, easy reading.. Keep up the good work !!!

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The Empty Park:

 

 

I am pleased you liked my poem JeanneTX46 and thank you for your usefull advice.


 

 

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thisisme789's picture

Beautiful! makes me feel like

Beautiful! makes me feel like i can actually see the buttercups, swings, slides, and hear the noises!


<3

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The Empty Park:

 

 

Thank you thisisme789, for reading my poetry and thanks for leaving such a positive comment.


 

 

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thisisme789's picture

No problem! I really did like

No problem! I really did like it!


<3

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as a part time  bootcamp

as a part time  bootcamp instructor you are making me feel bad! lol! I coached all my kids through sports and I miss it now that I am injured due to an accident, but I am getting back slowly. I love the charm and the pervaling sense of irksome accountability that sings through this poem! great piece!!!! hugss


Don't let any one shake your dream stars from your eyes, lest your soul Come away with them! -SS    

"Well, it's life SIMS, but not as we know it" - ¡$&am

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  Glad you liked my poem

 

 

Glad you liked my poem ssmothie, thank you for your encouraging remarks. Get well soon.


 

 

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cevance's picture

A wonderful piece. Very

A wonderful piece. Very enjoyable.

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The Empty Park

 

 

I am pleased that you enjoyed my poem cevance, thank you for your kind comments.


 

 

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bishu's picture

Hope prevails Dear Respected Madam.Invasive write

Lovely !!!! CONGRATULATIONS ON YOUR MILESTONE OF 50

 


©bishu 

 

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    Thank you for your

 

 

Thank you for your positive comment Bishu. And thank you for your salutations regarding my 50th poem.


 

 

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Have a go for the kids!

Yes, that's what parents sometimes have to do lol.

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    Thank you AngryLaughter

 

 

Thank you AngryLaughter for taking the time to read my poem glad it made you laugh.


 

 

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