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Commentary on Apocalypses Our sky drinks starlight
As it drips down from deep space
The night drinks starlight
As it drizzles
As it drizzles
Our sky drinks starlight
As it drizzles, as it rains
The night drinks starlight
As it drizzles
...and it's beautiful
What if the stars
Were flares
From our distant past,
Trying to warn us
About
Tomorrow but
Always too late.
And shooting stars
Were crash-landed
Prayers, not wishes to make.
Hopes and wishes
That never
Made it to heaven, just
Shot down by fate.
What if in the stars
It's al-
Ready been written?
That's why all our worlds
Are worlds apart,
To avoid others spoiling the plot
For world's just beginning?
I don't believe in
A path of predestination,
Though I can't explain why
We fail to avoid disaster.
Even when we're sitting
On a mountain of rubble,
We don't seem to get it.
But I don't foresee
Tarot cards giving me preparation.
Though I can't explain why
The cookie fortune often nails it.
Other than that bits of wisdom
Are a sort of prediction.
We don't seem to get it.
The only thing I know
About us and stars,
Is that we're made of them
And they're made of us.
Though we're so far apart.
Our sky drinks starlight
As it drips down from deep space
The night drinks starlight
As it drizzles
As it drizzles
Our sky drinks starlight
As it drizzles, as it rains
The night drinks starlight
As it drizzles
...and it's beautiful
Maybe the ancients were right
And the Sun is a god
And so are the stars
And if that's so
And I prefer the night,
Was I a polytheist
In some unknown,
Ancient life?
Theism
a recurring theme. Instead of “the” suggest “wet skies” I was readin over my prose post on writing novels and ways to substitute “the” with harder descriptives. “Thirsty, night drinks” v The night drinks. Critique to be ignored if stylistic preference. - S -
Appreciating this advice,
Appreciating this advice, once more, and I think I'm starting to better see what you're seeing. So, again, much gratitude.
No, by all means appreciated.
No, by all means appreciated. Thank you. I will look over your suggestions and give them serious consideration. There are times where I feel like I have an uncomfortable amount of "the" running through my words. Thank you.
By the way, I don't know if the title to your comment was entendre about overuse of the word "the" and theistic themes, but if it was, nicely done ; )
Good Connection
An absolute coincidence, but I may have stumbled upon a new connotation for a belief syste: "The" ism; a new religious philosophy, like a new uncrowded world, "just beginning." :D
Haha. As the beloved painting
Haha. As the beloved painting teacher Bob Ross used to say, "happy accidents." ; )
nice writing here
nice writing here
Thank you : )
Thank you : )