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{Revised}

Did you even love me

Or ever really care

Did you ever notice

That I was always there

Could you ever know

How much I loved you

Did you really see

How much of it I knew

Would you ever ask me

Why I hurt this way

Did you truly hear me

In all I had to say

How often did I share

That you mean the world to me

Or did I say in earnest

At night you’re the face I see

Because I am betting that you didn’t

Love or even care

Not sure if you noticed

Everything that I laid bare

I know you'll never see

The tangled mess inside

Because if you did

I wouldn’t have to hide

But it is my secret

And you were a lie

A myth made in distance

Since the moment we said goodbye

 

 

 

 

{Original}

did you ever love me

did you ever care

did you ever notice

that i was even there

did you ever know

how much i love you

did you ever see

how much i really knew

did you ever ask

why I hurt this way

did you ever hear

what I have to say

did I ever tell you

you mean the world to me

that when I close my eyes

it your face I see

but I bet you didn't love me

and I bet you didn't care

and I don't know if you noticed

when i was even there

and i know you can't see

the way i feel inside

because if you did

then i wouldn't have to hide

but it's all a big secret

it's all a big lie

and it's all to late

because you already said goodbye

Author's Notes/Comments: 

"~*~dont ask~*~its nothing major just randomness~*~"{Origional}

 

Gods I was a cheeky shit as a teen. I changed the ending a bit and I was more honest with this go. I know I wrote this to someone who didn't deserve it. Someone who I think really grew hatred for me in their heart. Well the hatred of adolecence. I held so little of the actions of others against them. Took all the blame for anything gone wrong because I was 'crazy'. In my young heart I thought I could fix anything if I loved just right. Which made me act so impressivly wrong. But this peice, man it is just sad. The idol I created was never the person others shown to be.

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last updated 28 June 2023 - 9:57pm
©19 March 2006 - 11:04pm — ValentineBuchannan
24 December 2006 - 6:53am — David Lopez (not verified)
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did u hide? do you know i loved you that it wasnt a lie if its to me that is if it aint well im stupid 4 replying this way

20 March 2006 - 9:07pm — Nero (not verified)
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Well I loved you. Eddie loved you and thats the reason he said goodbye. He loved you so much that he couldn't take getting hurt by you. At least thats my honest opinion but I don't really know who this is to so I'll leave this comment at a "sweet poem Kasi"!