meeting you...

Nobody has ever claimed that I'm shy,

but it happened that day, and i do not know why.

I felt alone, and even a little bit blue,

but when he said hello, I didnt know what to do.

I stopped staring at the book I'd held in my hand,

and slowly looked up to where he did stand.

I felt a slight panic as my heart ceased to beat,

then my gaze skidded quickly back to my feet.

Then, as if all of this wasn't nearly enough,

I felt like suffocating and other stuff.

His large masculine presence was so very strong,

so were his arms, legs, and cologne.

He shifted uncomfy from left foot to right,

but didn't look like one to give much of a fight.

I stood from my desk, he was so achingly tall,

my knees felt quite weak, and I thought I would fall.

I tricked myself into looking up inch by inch,

but when they reached his, I saw him nearly flinch.

For when I forced myself to look in his eyes,

I saw in them pure nerves, though I was about half his size.

I could hardly believe that this giant feared me!

didn't he know I was scared? couldn't he see?

He muttered some sorry as his face filled with heat,

then quickly he left and I sank once more to my seat.

So i guess I am shy, even though I didn't know it,

I will try to conquere this disease, bit by bit.

I guess in the long and the short of this rhyme,

Im saying that I wont be shy next time ;)

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failforever's picture

I really like this one, you say it is bad but the story says a lot. A very powerful and emotional piece. In my experience if you cannot come up with a title and you label it with untitled, you should leave it, but that's just my opinion.

Unblind Truth's picture

Hmm...

(Nerves?} for a title. Don't know typically authors know the best way to sum up their own poems.

As for the poem. It truly isn't that bad. And I absolutely love the AG intro. Other than that you have a few mismatched description terms. as well as a set of forced rhyming words. But you conveyed what you wanted to say without giving a headache and perhaps even giving a new POV on the issue. All in all still a good poem.

(sorry I tend to hang out at authors sites that I enjoy.)

Dorshima Fowlkes's picture

I think this poem is really cute! How about One Fine Day?