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Depression Dreams 6 - 20 - 01
foggy and unclear
my dreams draw near
replaced by dread
they are now dead
accompanied by fear
alone in here
no warmth with me
no dreams I see
crying and scared
my body now bared
in circles i twirl
no end to this world
no warmth, no light
with plenty of fear
and plenty of night
but lacking one thing
a reason to go on
a reason to live
no dream to hold on
no dream to give
dark
alone
tired
unknown
this is my home
this is my roam....
Excellent, you have quite a skill for writing. Keep with it, and you'll only get better. I really liked this one. You have such a unique way with your poems, they're short, yet tell so much. You have quite a gift, like I said: keep with it. Locke
Again, the structure is good & very well - rhymed. It lulls you along with the sweet siren - like quality of its words. Then it hits you with its direct impact in stanza 6: dark alone tired alone And the point is driven directly home.... This is the true heart of this piece. There are strong emotions felt when the darkness falls. The night brings them to life. Again, a really good work. Amy
Gentle is the night♥
hey it's your friend, ami. you know me..... the one who always puts stars in msn. but speaking of stars, this poem gets 5 stars.