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A Great Emptiness
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The Every Now and Thens
I dug up this flesh
from years ago
kept it white
shiny
clean
preserved in the finest
because I knew,
I would need it back
I always knew I would have to go back
to all the decay I came from
Like laundry day,
when the dirty stuff is all laid out
I can make amends
I can tell the Devil I didn't mean
to make the deal
this mouth may yet smile
Either way, it is full of blood
I am always bleeding
Because I remember.
I remember being outside alone
with my things
the few tiny things I owned
and looking towards the horizon
for an answer
Do you know what came?
A great emptiness
and my soul hasn't fluttered since
I can't find the wings of my youth that
made me want a future
My thoughts are rabid
Tenacious
all over the place
I don't even know how to end this poem
So I won't.
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Well done, you did not know how to end it so you did not Wonderfull Bless You from Bern
this poem is great! I have
this poem is great! I have alot of poems that show emptiness hope you will stop by and read and comment on some. thanks for sharing your work. i plan on reading more
Thank you so very much:). I
Thank you so very much:). I will absolutely stop by and check you out. I love your profile name!
"It is a terrible thing to be so open. It is as if my heart put on a face and walked into the world" -- Sylvia Plath.
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omg I love it! it's so real and raw and gutsie! "I don't even know how to end this poem, so I won't" <3
the only thing I would chnage is I would remove right from the end of "I can make amends" because I feel it makes the line stronger
the start is so elegant and relatable! Like we all know we carry our pasts with us and even when we chnage our old paterns are there should we want/need to resort to them. This piece is so human, don"t be down on it my dear!
Much Love
Ashley
Thank you Rabbits. I will
Thank you Rabbits. I will take you up on your suggestion. Yeah the past is a bitch. And she just keeps showing her face lol.
"It is a terrible thing to be so open. It is as if my heart put on a face and walked into the world" -- Sylvia Plath.
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we really gotta stop inviting her to our future parties eh?
Much Love
Ashley
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Yes, the line IS stonger - good call by She who Runs With Rabbits - also: write it, let the words fall where they may - there is great wisdom here. And personal growth is motivated by the never ending past. Turn around, shout, "Fuck you!" then turn around and keep stepping. That's what I do. ~Lady A~
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Much Love
Ashley