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Buried Under What You Never Could Give
Catch me
I’m falling
Too far for my tattered, lonely heart
Tears
Drip like rain drops on a window
Pain
Like blood from my
Broken heart
The wind
Blows
The sound of
Silence
That slices me apart
I felt
You there with
Me
Opening my eyes to the
Emptiness all around
Lost in space
I’m falling
The scent
Of your cologne
Lingers
Following me
To the vast, unfillable
Void
Nothing
But the blackness of
My withering soul
Is left because
The truth
You never gave me
You stood
And watched as I
Fell
Into the black whole
My heart has become
Your love
Nothing
But a
Lie
In the grave you dug for me
Fallen too far to be saved
Lost to life
Love taken
Away
All my blood seeping
Beneath
Weeping for eternity
With Grief
Under the ground
That has me
Forgotten.
I just wanted to tell you how much I love this poem. I think the title is wonderful in itself. I was really touched by the lines "The sound of/ silence/ the slices me apart" and "The scent/ of your cologne/ lingers/ following me". I can really feel it when you talk about silence slicing you apart...it's something I've experienced but I could never put into words. Beautiful poem. I love it's structure too.
You know I don't like to be thanked, especially for hurting you and really not doing anything worth being proud of at all, but i'm glad that I could inspire you to write. This has an odd style. You seem to be forming new and rather interesting styles with you poems lately. it's nice to see you stretch your pen. I think it's cool how you perposely seperate certain words or string of words by giving them there own line. It puts emphasis on certain things an adds feeling were there otherwise wouldn't be as much. Although this poem is sad, and I hate reading sad poems especially from people that i care so much about, I think that it is very well written and you should be proud that you could create such a thing.
This poem really tells a story. I like how it is centered and how you divided the lines - it really adds to the poem. I don't really now how to describe it...it's clear yet cloudy, and almost ethereal (if that makes any sense). Anyways, I think it's a great one.
Nathaniel
wish I could stop you from falling!