loves larking lukewarm lullabies

stare with hunger as i flap my tiny little wings
for your song sounds powerfully stern
my low flexural modulus is hardly so firm
o curious eagle why do you care to stay
why even pay attention to me the little bluejay
my soul isn't worth the climb

i'm never a master, more like a disaster
care not for me, i'm just painting my dawn
not knowing what comes next, please do not be vexed.

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My eye covers the fire of the

My eye covers the fire of the unseen light of distant bodies of space yet undiscovered beaming their intelligence in flashes of light and dropping their tune to the speed of life.  Dampening fields of darkness in space covered with eyes of divine driven grace your empathy balanced with swords of despair in depths of eternal funeral pyre love's despair

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Thanks but my disagreement

Thanks but my disagreement was your soul was worth the climb ;) still a lovely poem.


Don't let any one shake your dream stars from your eyes, lest your soul Come away with them! -SS    

"Well, it's life SIMS, but not as we know it" - ¡$&am

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the title is outstanding very eye grabbing..........

and trust me I'm a woman who loves a good title. Is almost my trademark (laughs) I agree with smoothie the whole thing is outstanding but the dime part otherwise you nailed it. I had a teacher who use to say write the poem then go back and be more original with the cliches so for the dime of your time I'd give you the same advice. I try very hard to do that with my own. Sometimes I succeed and sometimes I have to leave the cliche in cause I just can't find a better more original fit. Anyway enjoyed your poems. Welcome to our big little community here and keep sharing, Sincerely , Melissa Lundeen.

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We are all masters of our

We are all masters of our destiny and every soul matters. Especially ones that are the embodyment of Creative compassion. You're an amazing writer sir you have a talent and a knack that shines brighter than any aster's cllampuring gleaming glory of light for you are good even if a little misunderstood :) liked everything except the dime bit cause money is never has any value in the soul, yours is rich. Peace.


Don't let any one shake your dream stars from your eyes, lest your soul Come away with them! -SS    

"Well, it's life SIMS, but not as we know it" - ¡$&am

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Painted Dawn

...i'm just painting my dawn...What a line. Beautiful. The lower case is lovely too. blue jay to eagle - the lines are so well and deliberately balanced. ~allets~

 



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