Sunlit Tears

Sweet and sour is love when I ponder

"Why is there pain when you're gone?"

Author's Notes/Comments: 

Not as much impact as my first one "Moondrop Memories" but I'll try thinking of better ones in the future.  Originally I wanted to put 'Sweet and sour is "my first" love...' but I decided against it because love in general could have a better effect.  It could apply more to people but I could be wrong.  Possibly the other is better.

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jonfeb's picture

My advice? Try to turn this into a Haiku. You have already nearly got the right number of syllables going there. This is worth playing around with a bit. "No great poem is ever finished only ever abandoned".