Drowning

Sinking in an ocean 

of salty tears 

I go down 

deeper 

deeper 

water over my crown

drowning 

can't breath 

please save me 

sinking 

sinking

drowning in broken love 

my blood freezes 

but my tears feel like fire 

I gasp from the firey pain 

water fills my lungs 

the weight of heartbreak in my chest 

burning 

burning 

I go numb 

Choking on the water 

the last bit of air escapes my lungs

and finally the pain disappears

 
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Starward's picture

Poignant in its description,

Poignant in its description, this poem is very powerful.


Starward

allets's picture

Things That Make Me Want To Die

Not heartbreak or loss of a relationship, rather inescapable pain: a nuclear blast coming at me, actual drowning with no help possible, inside the trade towers during 911, plane about to crash...men, you get over them eventually and live. Interesting metaphorical manipulation - allets -