Although I had a little: Although I had a little trouble with lines one and four, I really enjoyed the poem and the calm tone with which it is presented. You have put a lot of quiet power in the brief space of seven lines.
The reshaping of ancient: The reshaping of ancient themes (in order to bring our attention to details to which we have become jaded or forgetful) is, in my opinion, one of the supreme functions of Poetry. In that way, Vergil expanded the tale of a minor Homeric character to give us the epic beginnings of the founding of Rome itself. In that tradition, you demonstrate your innate talent and high degree of verbal skill as a Poet. To see it done on this site is one of the blessings that have come to me of late.
I’m deeply moved,: I’m deeply moved, Coerulescent, to hear that “Fig Leaves in the Wind” served as a verbal curative after your medical ordeal, and your resilience in the face of such a rough day shines through your words. Thank you for letting these poems be a blessing in your life—may they continue to bring you solace and spark new moments of wonder on your journey.
Your generous reading brings: Your generous reading brings the poem to life, dear S74r5p4r3d; seeing it as an event rather than mere words captures exactly what I hoped to spark. I’m thrilled that the journey from wandering to wonder resonated with you, and your thoughtful praise inspires me to keep reshaping such themes into fresh, shared experiences.
And here is a sequel to the: And here is a sequel to the previous poem, an extended reimagining of the Genesis tale, which presents a most powerful perspective indeed. I have had a very rough day, medically, but reading these two poems as the crisis subsided was like receiving a verbal curative from one of PostPoems' finest. Reading your poems at this stage in my life is a blessing indeed.
When you post a poem, you are: When you post a poem, you are not just filling a screen, but creating an event because of the quality of your verbal artistry. This particular poem, a reimagining or new interpretation of Genesis 3 approaches its subject with a new perspective but takes it place among the best of ancient iterations of the sacred subject. I especially like the way the poem moves from wandering, in line 1, to settling in a dwelling of wonder in line 20.
I really like this poem. The: I really like this poem. The autumnal imagery is deployed in a way that is not just merely read, but is also felt---in the soul, and in the gut. As a child, I always enjoyed Autumn, and this poem remminded me of those memories. I also enjoyed the rhyme scheme, although the last stanza tossed it away, and I think you could write a better version of that last stanza. But, overall, this poem has been a great reading experience.
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