A Hauki

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she said she loved me,
but that was a lie.
because today, she said goodbye.

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Cascade's picture

It's a fine Hauki if that's

It's a fine Haiku if that's what you call it, it's ok with me. Very direct and to the point, sir

word_man's picture

close enough,,don`t have the

close enough,,don`t have the 757 but it sounded close enough to me,,thank you for the visit

Starward's picture

The form of Haiku is not

The form of Haiku is not easily written, but you have done a masterful work here, creating an entire implied backstory, and a profound depth of emotional agony, in 

three short lines.  Wow!


Starward

 

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thank you for the visit,not

thank you for the visit,not really a hauki ,but close enough for me

SSmoothie's picture

Sleek! Nicely put together :)

Sleek! Nicely put together :)


Don't let any one shake your dream stars from your eyes, lest your soul Come away with them! -SS    

"Well, it's life SIMS, but not as we know it" - ¡$&am

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thank you

thank you

bishu's picture

Yess

This was BANG on the nail !! No frills


©bishu 

 

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thank you mr bishu

thank you mr bishu

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i know this is not a real

i know this is not a real hauki,

but who cares,i like it

Beatnik1979's picture

Its

its only not real if it doesn't exist...

and this is a fine haiku...

perhaps the style shoud be the aptly named Parrish Haiku...

very clever indeed

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thank you, maybe it would

thank you, maybe it would

allets's picture

red shirt Haiku

hey, it's me :~s~


 

 

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lol,whos me ?

lol,whos me ?