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Depression/sadness I'm crying,
crying out for help
but no one seems
to hear.
I'm dying,
dying deep inside
but no one seems
to see.
I'm begging,
begging to be heard
but no one seems
to care.
I'm withdrawing,
withdrawing from the world
but no one seems
to notice.
I'm breaking,
breaking down slowly,
but no one seems
to know.
Okay.... This MAY so stupid
Okay.... This MAY so stupid coming from a fifteen year old, but when I decide on a title I write the poem first, then go through again and see if there is a phrase (or even just a word) that is repeated often. If there isn't a repeated word/phrase then I think of who/what I wrote it about and just bounce ideas off walls..
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Going by what I said above, I would say that "No One Seems To" would work. Definitely not the best option, but would definitely work.
With Love,
K.J.A.
~~We can fade away together one dream at a time.~~
THAT WAS WHAT I THOUGHT
THAT WAS WHAT I THOUGHT ORIGINALLY! OMG that's scary!
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Like I said, definitely not
Like I said, definitely not the best option, but still an available option.
~~We can fade away together one dream at a time.~~
That was seriously what I
That was seriously what I first thought about calling it
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I Like This
I probably like this poem because I can associate with what you wrote. I like the form, flow, and progression. I think this poem has potential, and could be heartbreaking if improved. You need to reach all your readers, not just those who are naturally empathic towards the subject. Sadly, most people would read this and say that your just winy, which diminishes the value of your work. I think good writing is more than sharing experiences, but being able to create new experiences, where a person can literally experience something new just through reading. Really good writing is almost alive. Your poem already reaches readers who understand what you’re going through. With more work, I think your poem could reach readers who are inexperienced with this subject matter.
Here are some title ideas:
“Dead to the World”
“Silent”
“An Unanswered Plea”
“Alone”
“Invisible”
“Isolated Despair”
“Song of the Voiceless”
Note: This is mostly opinion because I don’t have the right credentials to give you good advice about your poem.
Haha your advice is the best
Haha your advice is the best i've gotten! How do you think i could improve it???? I don't know for sure how to reach more than those who can get this....
I love "Dead to the World", "Song of the Voiceless" "Isolated Despair" "An Unanswered Plea"! Beautiful ideas!!! Love them! I might use them for some more poems!!!! <3 Thanks so much!
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