I'm running through the actions,
but I'm not all there.

I'm doing what's expected,
but I'm not paying attention.

I act like I understand,
but I cannot concentrate.

I'm acting out the motions,
but don't remember doing them.

I'm here with my body,
but not with my heart,
and not with my mind.

I'm moving through the day
like a robot, following commands.

My movements don't seem
like they're my own.

I'm being told what to do,
by someone who I can't see.

They've gotten a remote controller,
and have gotten me to follow it.

I'm distracted from what I'm doing,
for some reason I'm not sure.

I'll figure it out, eventually,
but for right now, I can only
follow the directions given to me.

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A work in progress! Please, tell me what you think!

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SSmoothie's picture

Yes I think you phased it very well! :)

The only thing I can say is that the last three lines need a little work to fit the rhythm of the poem, I think you need to add one more word on each of the two previous lines

Il pm u with an example ;) cheers SS

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Could you just post it on my

Could you just post it on my wall? I'm still not able to read my messages.


facethetruth2b's picture

I think I beleive we all have

I think I beleive we all have our days , weeks or even months like these ..I like the start of it cannot wait til the ending is put into place...

you laugh at me because I am differant, I laugh at you because You are all the same ...(KoRn) J.D......

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Lol, yea. thanks for

Lol, yea. thanks for commenting