he says                she says

    you never give        you never listen

  me space to kick     to me and when does

back and relax after    my day ever end and

  a long day's work  why don't you take me

   a chance to drink   out more often and

      a cold beer and will you ever say

            watch the    you love

                  game    me

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poetvg's picture

great work
i know what
it is like
to go thru that .

onelilartist's picture

I love concrete poems--ESPECIALLY when they make sense like this one. I am saving your page to my favorites. I have about 10 poets on my list of favorites and now you. I like your work.

Brittany Betz's picture

WOW! Great poem. Makes total sense. And the heart shape
was way cool. You are really a creative poet. Keep the
spirit, never stop. ~Britters~

"You don't get to choose who you love you're not suppose

Deborah Russell's picture

Very nice, needs a touch up on she says part. think you meant "when he does" but the forms are great. I used to do them in typing class back in high school. One of my favourite free time activities. Take care...