+ 1ST POEMS: Written To Declare The Kinship Of All Things, A Metaphysic In Four Tanka

[to Patriciajj---whose Poetry declares the

cosmic grandeur with profound wisdom; my

poem could not have been written without

your magnificent Poem, "Earth Cry"]


Atoms of which all

things consist emerged with the

Cosmos, or in stars'

cores, fused:  this suggests kinship

of all the cosmos contains.


Bullies, cockroaches;

stones, seashells, stars;  any two

lovers; Poets and

starwatchers; cherry blossoms,

and spring's mists:  all share kinship.


Lucretius---long poems

fail this.  Haiku, Senryu,

Tanka and Sijo

convey this effectively---

intimations, like seasons'.


Stars, cherry blossoms,

and mists express the Cosmos'

grandeur---undiffused

across long poems' ambitions;

well preserved by brief glimpses.


Kyakuchuu

aka

Starward-Led, an Orthodox Christian

[*/+/^]

Author's Notes/Comments: 

The third stanza recounts something I learned from writing comments on the Poems of Patriciajj, although I have only just now been able to articulate it:  that epic poems (like Lucrteius' De Rerum Natura---which I read in the spring of 1986) do not convey the cosmic kinship as well as shorter poems, like Patriciajj's, and like the Asian forms in their traditional formats.  I am grateful to Patricajj, whose cosmic Poems have taught me this.  

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This delicate wonder

This delicate wonder demonstrates the very elegance you describe.

 

I'm awed by the stunning vastness of thought conveyed in glorious simplicity, in fine-woven contemplation, and truly humbled that I could have had any part in this reflection. You are greatly appreciated for your cherished contributions here; your superior talent, insight, knowledge and encouragement means more to me (and many others) than you know.

 

Be blessed, Valued Poet, beyond your wildest dreams.

 
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Thank you.  I realize I could

Thank you.  I realize I could not have written this without having seen "Earth Cry" first. and I shall amend the dedication to reflect that.  Thank you for your kind words, as well as the inspiration you provide to so many on this site---including myself.  Random browsing has not always been friendly to me, but that day in March, 2020, when it brought me to your Poems, that blessing became a tremendous gift that continues to radiate (and resonate) like the sky's most brilliant stars.


Starward-Led [in Chrismation, Januarius]

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My heart cannot contain the

My heart cannot contain the gratitude I feel upon receiving this gift. And coming from a poetic scholar with an interest in all things cosmic, I feel doubly blessed. Endless thanks.