the truth of the matador

truth.

my tainted version or yours?

I cant find the reasons that I need to convince you

you cant find the words to make me understand.

 

I dont want to wallow in your misery,

I am happy in my own

feed me more bullshit and inspire me to write insipid vicious lines about you

i'll make them dance in pretty lines and force you to confess!

 

I will seduce you with lies and pull out my version of truth,

and you will hide from me all that you feel,

because you believe my lies are my truth revealed.

 

what a lovely tango!

our dance of fire and ice; 

first passion and sex

cold disintrest next.

 

dance with me my beautiful liar

dance with the words of my song in your head

push through my curtains and find whats there

your truth or mine it seems we never care

it never mattered as much as our lovers dance

a careless tango brought to life with fierce exchanges

a slap in the face

a caress of redemption

 

our lies,

our seductions

our words,

are our weapons

our music,

are our emotions

our dance,

is our truth

our love,

our curse

 

this is our pain my fierce love,

let's dance our tango

and create our timeless verse.

 

 

previous version below:

 

 

truth. my tainted version or yours?

I cant find the reasons that I need to convince you

you cant find the words to make me understand

I dont want to wallow in your misery I am happy in my own

feed me more bullshit and inspire me to write insipid vicious lines about you

i'll make them dance in pretty lines and force you to confess

I  will seduce you with lies and pull out my version of truth

and you will hide from me all that you feel,

because you believe my lies are my truth.

what a lovely tango our fire and ice 

passion and sex

cold disintrest next

dance with me my beautiful liar

dance with the words of my song in your head

push through my curtains and find whats there

your truth or mine it never mattered

as much as our lovers dance

a careless tango brought to life with fierce exchanges

a slap in the face

a caress of redemption

this is our seduction

our lies

this is our truth

our dance

these are our weapons

our words.

let's dance our tango

and create our timeless verse.

 

 

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Yeah...

Yeah...


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"Well, it's life SIMS, but not as we know it" - ¡$&am

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LMBAO Respected Silk or whatever Sir or Madam or whatever

LMBAO Respected Silk or whatever Sir or Madam or whatever. A truth emerges. Why do nondecrepit scribblers like me write at all ?? Passing time as nothing better to do. I about 5 minutes or so my student shall arrive and I'll impart education(BS) for a paltry fee... ~Yours~forever~dabbling~ink~on~water


©bishu 

 

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hA HA bISHY!

yOU KEEP ME READING YOUR COMMENTS OVER AND OVER AGAIN AND STILL I FIND NEW INTEREST IN THEM! LOL! HUGSS


Don't let any one shake your dream stars from your eyes, lest your soul Come away with them! -SS    

"Well, it's life SIMS, but not as we know it" - ¡$&am

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I like the second one. It is

I like the second one. It is so much more dramatic... so much more of what it takes for the dance to go on...  more to suck and seduce the audience in, which is after all, what a lie is.

 

I love the title most, SS.

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...and he asked her, "do you write poetry? Because I feel as if I am the ink that flows from your quill."

"No", she replied, "but I have experienced it. "

 

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yes the second is more

yes the second is more gutteral and has the spirit in it while the second starts to conform... its like the two versions of us the messy and the structure. its is perhaps why i did not have the heart to delete the privious. isnt ironically symbolic of the whole process??? thanks for the insights! hugss

 


Don't let any one shake your dream stars from your eyes, lest your soul Come away with them! -SS    

"Well, it's life SIMS, but not as we know it" - ¡$&am

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yes I got in!!! prefrences on

yes I got in!!! prefrences on which version would be much appreciated thanks! still drafting.


Don't let any one shake your dream stars from your eyes, lest your soul Come away with them! -SS    

"Well, it's life SIMS, but not as we know it" - ¡$&am

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Seriously,

This is gorgeous. I love the "careless tango brought to life with fierce exchanges" line. 

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thanks Reila,  it needs

thanks Reila,  it needs editing but I cant get in at the moment the link is not working. the last lines basiscally need rearranging and some grammar would help! lol! cheers SS


Don't let any one shake your dream stars from your eyes, lest your soul Come away with them! -SS    

"Well, it's life SIMS, but not as we know it" - ¡$&am

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Tap, Shimmy, Tarentella, Ballroom

Snap your fingers to this one, the rhythm is like the tides, both versions have their attractions, but I like the line spacing on the second one (the sudden short lines were distracting and killed the rhythm that is so wonderfully preserved in the longer line lengths). The "tango" was haunting in its repetition. I have about six lines that are favorites - the tone of your voice is magically consistent. ~A~

 

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EXCELLENT POINTS LADY A!

i SHALL HAVE TO WORK ON THIS, HOWEVER MY INTENTIONS ARE THAT BREAKS ARE SLIGHT PAUSES... BUT THAT SHIT CLEARLY AINT WORKIN FOR YAS! iM A LITTLE INSENSITIVE IT SEEMS! LOL! HUGSS BEST ADVICE... i HOPE i TAKE IT ;D!


Don't let any one shake your dream stars from your eyes, lest your soul Come away with them! -SS    

"Well, it's life SIMS, but not as we know it" - ¡$&am