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Flying free
Away from here
My love burned me
Now nothing to fear
Nothing to lose
Everything's gone
All I have left
Are the words of a song

Free to fly
Away from here
Nothing to hold me
Not one tear
My ashes will fly
On the wings of the breeze
And you'll hear my love
In the whispers of the trees

Who knew I could make ashes from cinders?
Who knew that Snow could be made of heat?
Who knew that love doesn't last forever?
Who knew that loss could make me complete?

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ashes_twisted's picture

I Loved this but..

I felt that you held back on this one..
I've read your writings countless times, and I know that this is not all you have..
I can see your freedom, but I cannot taste it.
I want you to shove my face in your plate, and tell me to eat it.

Show me.
^_^


"We are, Each of us angels with only one wing, and we can only fly by embracing one another." -Luciano De Crescenzo

Seraphim's picture

Thats exactly how I feel

Thats exactly how I feel actually... I can see the freedom, but I can't taste it. I'm rather apathetic about it. But thanks for the comment, and I'm sure you'll enjoy some of the future poems. Keep writing.

~Seraphim~


Post Tenebras Spero Lucem

ashes_twisted's picture

Whenever I write a piece, and

Whenever I write a piece, and there is ever a feeling of doubt about the words I am trying to say I will keep working with it until I'm satisfied.

I'm sure that I will enjoy your future poems as well,
but promise me that you will keep working with this one.

^_^


"We are, Each of us angels with only one wing, and we can only fly by embracing one another." -Luciano De Crescenzo

Seraphim's picture

For your sake, I'll keep

For your sake, I'll keep working on it... :P I'll post the revised edition another day

Your Friend,
Seraphim


Post Tenebras Spero Lucem

ashes_twisted's picture

Eagerly..

I will be waiting for it.
=^.^=


"We are, Each of us angels with only one wing, and we can only fly by embracing one another." -Luciano De Crescenzo

SSmoothie's picture

Excellent! I love this poem

Excellent! I love this poem that last line especially whoah! Awesome job!


Don't let any one shake your dream stars from your eyes, lest your soul Come away with them! -SS    

"Well, it's life SIMS, but not as we know it" - ¡$&am