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Have You Ever Cried
Have you ever cried?
I don’t think you have
No, because…
I’ve never seen as hurt as you!
You never cry
because of pain or hurtful things they say
you refuse to cry
just because they want you too!
Give in…
In to pain
Into hurtful things they say
Real pride won’t let them win
All you’re doing is strengthening you pride
You need to cry
Stop and listen
BAM BAM BOOM
they’re gone with one step
Just take this step
And the step to make them leave is…
Make them…
CRY!
Hey Robyn, I like this a lot. I've been more into the lyrical scene lately, so it's nice to see real poetry again (though some may argue, and I occasionally argue, that poems and lyrics are the same). You're really good at this stuff. As for the actual poem...
"I've never seen as hurt as you"... should that be "I've never seen anybody as hurt as you"? Also, you might want to flesh out a couple of lines for asthetics and flow. Other than that, solid effort. I love it.
this one is giving advice to a friend who is clearly being bullyed. it's very good advice and all your friends who are being bullyed right now should take this advice your a very good friend and to give advice through a pome is a great way to give advice good job never stop