the unpeeling

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The Unpeeling

 

 

The room was full of children spinning round,

a frantic, bright-eyed choreography,

stamping the dust, reclaiming sacred ground

with right arm, left arm, mechanical glee.

 

We wore the name like a crisp, unblemished sleeve,

a badge pinned neatly to a youthful chest,

where it was easy, static, to believe,

and every promise was a welcome guest.

 

But the rhythm slows. The bright lights drop away.

The chant decays into a wider space.

The outer rind of safety flakes to grey,

and time begins to carve a different face.

 

He was no spring chicken when the silence broke.

A century of gravel in his stride,

of heavy tents beneath the desert smoke,

and all the young illusions clarified

 

down to the bone. The title that we sing

was never meant to be a golden crown;

it was a textured, slow, and scarred thing,

a lifetime’s heavy armour melting down.

 

The label peels. The proud identity

dissolves into a mode of holding fast

—not with the swagger of a certainty,

but like a ship that strips its final mast

 

to meet the gale. The faith that counted then

was just the raw capacity to bear

the weight of being emptied out again,

and finding righteousness in bare despair.

 

So let the clock unwind its tighter gears.

Unwrap the map you thought you had to hold.

You cannot skip the friction of the years;

the skin must tear before the truth is told.

 

Turn down the noise. Step off the frantic floor.

Accept the quiet shedding of the known,

and walk, unpeeled, toward the open door—

to personhood you'd yet be grown into,

a place through journey to yet be shown; 

a vast expanse of innumerable stars.

 

 

 

 

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Author's Notes/Comments: 

 

The Right Arm, The Left Foot, The Long Wait

[The Intro - Fast, Bright, Nostalgic]

Father Abraham had many sons / Many sons had Father Abraham...

We sing it to children so they feel the scope of the crowd.

We teach them the motions. Right arm, left arm.

We make a game out of a legacy. A sense of identity.

 

[The Shift - The Rhythm Slows, Becoming Heavy, Percussive]

But look closer at the man leading the choreography.

He is no spring chicken. When the promise finally landed,

he wasn't standing tall on a pedestal—he was leaning heavily on a staff.

Those "many sons" didn't come from a youthful sprint;

they came after a century of dust, doubt, and quiet tents under silent stars.

 

[The Core Message - Stripped Back, Intimate]

To the young ones claiming the name:

Abrahamic is less of a badge you pin to your jacket and more of a scar left by the fire.

It’s not a label to shout; it’s a mode of survival.

He didn't find righteousness because he checked the boxes or wore the uniform.

He found it when his body was as good as dead, and he chose to take one more step anyway.

 

[The Outro - A Slow, Deliberate Rhythm]

So right arm, left arm, right foot, left foot.

Don't just do the dance.

Feel the weight of the years it took to write/sing the song.

Turn around, sit down... and wait, dance, for the promise.

 

 

 

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