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Can't Be
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closet boxes 2002 Wide awake and all alone
my reflection can't be seen
not happy, not despaired
but somewhere unhappy in between.
The dim light casts shadows
though mine can't be found
they all point and laugh
as I fall to the ground.
You stand so far off
and your touch can't be felt
this feeling now cold
when before I would melt.
Your eyes pierce my soul
but your thoughts can't be known
and if you are here
must I feel so alone.
Your voice says goodbye
that your heart can't be held
why bother to wonder
why this feels just like my hell.
Very well written, I enjoyed reading this one.
"Your eyes pierce my soul." Awesome line.
I would take unhappy outta the first stanza and leave it as between, it reads smoother,
i like the second stanza :)
and the third one isn't bad
but the rest kinda gets choppi but still good
ash
Much Love
Ashley