Sweet Relevation

With dark intensive eyes he watches me 
And mine, absent-mindedly gaze right back
He gave me forever, free feeling
Running endlessly through my mind was Jack

Sparks flew, I looked up and the world spinning
The moment was frantically definite
I sent excitement to the lights grinning
This amorous feeling is infinite

Twirling and whirling as my toes went numb
Shining face, Eyes to trace, all the things we hide
You are the speckled sky I have become 
I saw another running through your mind

My Love: patient, kind, cruel ... surely takes time
Sadly but slow, love makes you lose your mind

Author's Notes/Comments: 

I fixed it from the last poem i wrote. I just wanna see which one you guys like better and the feedback on both please 

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If you like it

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Thanks :)

Thanks :)


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