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Why
Why would you do this to me
These feelings are to painful and achy
Did you even think of my feelings
Or do ijust make you that unhappy
Why couldn't you just leave
It's obvious you didn't need me
It's sad you didn't think how this was going to affect our family
Why won't this pain go away
I assumed if I forgave you, it wouldn't stay
Please don't make me regret giving you a second chance
I seriously need to know if your going to be an actual man
Why can't you tell me it's going to be okay
And that your going to be here to stay
Prove to me that your family ain't worth losing over your stupid selfish idiotic mistake
Why can't you tell me you truly love me and our family
touching write
touching write
ron parrish
I would work on grammar. In
I would work on grammar. In other words...what reads better?
"WHY would you do this to me???"
"Why won't this pain go away??"
Or
"Why would you do this to me"
"Why won't this pain go away"
See the difference?
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...and he asked her, "do you write poetry? Because I feel as if I am the ink that flows from your quill."
"No", she replied, "but I have experienced it. "
Sounds honest and painful.
Sounds honest and painful. Like you have a lot more emotion to pour out through poetry. Keep writing! Welcome back to PP!
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Feeling Pain
says it concisely without all the fluff - no achy needed, if you feel pain it IS achy. You're is you are, your is possesive as in your smile, your poetry - watch your line lengths - hope this helps get your groove back ~Stella~
.
You left
I felt pain.
You are not
coming back
but you
should. And
soon.
.
~A~