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I Hate You
Why dont I cry again?
Why dont I break away from this?
Do you think I’d tell you or anyone else?
Don’t make me laugh,
I hate you. I know you hate me too.
Don’t ignore me. I’ll scream till you listen.
You’re rude don’t mock me.
Don’t clog my mind again I need to think.
You’re nothing more than a voice to me.
So don’t talk to me let me be.
You’re a scab a wound that you want me to pick at
Only until I can’t escape this pain,
But I wont.
I like this one!!
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well.. i think its way too much of a conversation-type of writin.. not really poetry at all.. more like prose.. u need more metaphors.. more meaning.. more direction.. poetry isnt something that u jus go one day like "dam i feel proud for dissin this guy/girl..i should put that into a poem" or something, haha.. xD
..u dont necessarily need rhyme.. but at least, more.. depth.. really, u jus need more meaning..