Remember ( please give feedback )

Remember me when but my soul remains,
When seeds have grown, if only you had known
With what joy my life was lived and with what pain
i'd suffer everyday, my secrets sown,

Remember not those fateful days when with
the bitterest resentment and despair,
I wasted precious moments thinking only
of mistakes i'd never before given care,

Don't let my footsteps wash away, dragged to
the raging sea, the waves, the waves, they sigh,
Eternal life awaits the strong and true,
No record of my being and alas my memory dies,

When words do fade, and pages start to rot,
Look to this verse, and friend, forget-me-not.

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Elfy's picture

I really liked your poem, it

I really liked your poem, it was really good. It made me think about things.
Keep writing


-Elfy*

CaptainShambles's picture

again

Well done again. Thought i would give some feedback because its always nice to get some.
Again it is good i like the imagery and the rythm and the general thoughts behind the poem. Well done i say. (repeatedly)

Were you a victorian poet in a past life.
Because i spent last year studying thomas hardy and christina rossetti and your work gives off a similar air.
Although you have a bit further to go before you are there.
no please continue to post on this site. and enjoy post poems while your here.


I'm sorry i wasn't who you thought i was. F**k it, i'm sorry i wasn't who i thought i was.
...I bought the heartbreak hotel on my own with no investors, closed it down and opened the F**k you, get over it bed and breakfast

JessH's picture

Thanks, i really appreciate

Thanks, i really appreciate your comment, :D

jgupta's picture

Poem Remember

Hi JessH - Cyber world will always preserve your lovely verse!

JessH's picture

thanks :)

thanks :)

Morningglory's picture

Like your words

Nefariously I look to thee
as I just got back from a killing spree
Hearing these words I apply them to me.
Cuz the love I wanted just couldn't be.


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