You Got Me Trending

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Lovespeak

Cool but cruel is what you are

After three years, everything changed

You came in my lonely days

Love speaks but can fall apart

 

You say those words so crazy

It becomes very usual

I write these odes so silly

This becomes very casual

 

No, I can't get mad at you

You make my true self get loose

So, just keep on what you're doing

'Cause baby, you got me trending

 

All those words you told me

I hear them in my ears

All the things you brought me

They all are written here

 

Rising like a rocket

Shining like a bright star

Oozing fire like a jet

Popping out of the jar

 

Oh, baby this feels so good

You got me leading

So, baby please continue 

What you do to me

 

And if you dare stop

You'll make my heart pop

I may paint  something cruel

After that we'll be cool

 
nightlight1220's picture

The ending is unexpected and

The ending is unexpected and what happens so often when we become apathetic about the use of vengeance. Nice write!


...and he asked her, "do you write poetry? Because I feel as if I am the ink that flows from your quill."

"No", she replied, "but I have experienced it. "

 

allets's picture

Experimenting In Imagery

 

Your work has come a long way, love the near rhymes tremendously. The last verse is odd, especially with the bulk of the poem so upbeat and optimistic. It felt wonderful! A threat at the end of sooooo much love and promise and love actualized? Hmmmm...but the balance of the poem is superb. Bravo and encore - Lay a

 


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