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Empty Cases and Empty Minds
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The Wanderer Pavements painted with blood stained pain
Have been washed away with the tears of the fighting young
Cracked from the stampeding of hammer boots and explosive tongues
Are treaded on by abused saints and extinguished flames
All I see are empty cases and empty minds
A path built on faulty grains and potholed roads
Lead to a winding edge of nowhere
My maps are aged and the walk is heavy
Each breath is a step closer to a destination never found
Empty cases watching empty minds
My trudges are earthquake bound
Traveling the route of desolation
Going from town to town and from wasteland to wasteland
As the rain cracks on concrete I continue the cruel course I created
With empty cases and empty minds
My bags were packed with loneliness and loss
But I couldn't dare to wrap up a life that weighed down
So I left everything behind
Trying new roads and in search of new days
To fill my empty cases and empty mind
First, this is the kind of
First, this is the kind of poem that many old poets wish they could have written when they were your age. You are very advanced! I love the musical structure of this poem, just enough repetition to make it sound symphonic (and I am listening to Sibelius' 6th symphony as I write). This poem is one of the centerpieces of your work.
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Simply amazing!
Excellent poem, in all aspects, but the line, "As the rain cracks on concrete I continue the cruel course I created" just blew me away!
thank you so very much!!!! :)
thank you so very much!!!! :) your comments are greatly appreciated!
All who
wander are not lost.....To me, the wanderer has always fascinated me...the vagabond...the traveller...
The choice use of devices used within this poem demonstrate that you have earned your merits as a skilled poet.
What to fill the cases and mind with?
With each new post you offer something more...thats what keeps us hooked..
Excellent poetry
x) i think ive heard that
x) i think ive heard that line before.... thank you :)
Refreshingly Original
The aliterative consonance was awesome "...cruel course I created..." - Just Bein' Stella
That you so much!! I really
That you so much!! I really appreciate it! :)