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Thoughts of a Kid
He looked at the laser
Lingering on a thought,
Though this cuts the material
Might it also cut my finger.
For if it did would it hurt?
Horribly or just somewhat?
He was thinking of ending
Evermore his life for sure.
Shopping for an easy way
Where he would not feel a thing>
Terrible that at his young age
Awful thoughts occupy his mind.
May his life get much better
Before we have to help him to
The awaiting ambulance in the parking lot.
Loud siren sounding the emergency
Effects of a mispent youths life
Lasted only a few years.
Hi Renee What a sad and chilling poem... and I still have my own children to raise... pretty scary, hey? Thanks for sharing Roz
Another great emotion brought to the surface. I have dealt with many a child that near and/or succeeded. Sad to see such a large number of losses in young people. You have absorbed me into this world of his. Linda
Hi Renee', you don't really know me but hey! I'm here to critique your poem so does it matter??!?! Just teasing. Anyway, moving right along... This poem shows extreme insight and empathy, and a use of words that can only come from someone that truly understands the kind of pain the boy was feeling. At least that's my opinion. I'm really impressed, because many poets (myself included) have no problem expressing what they themselves are feeling, but when it comes to others they are at a loss for words. Great job and keep up the good work! Jill
i am glad that you were touched.... you being the WORD MAN..... that means alot.... this youth in this poem is very troubled and they is just nothing that anyone can do to help him.... what a shame....
how sad/...for young lives to be wasted away like that. I wonder how i would have felt....if i was there witnessing it. TOUching.