Two Hearts

Folder: 
Confessions

Angel eyes,
James Dean smile,
and a Marcos Not A Hero shirt
He was scouring the room when he found me first
Shy guy type,
crooked spine,
My heart compressed and prepared for the worst
The second he stepped in to my world,
I found my tongue struggling for some words


"I'm a bad conversation,"
I'd say, gripping harder on my first Chardonnay
"How else can you be a conversation?"
he'd flash a smile, flicking the last of his Marlboro Lights

 

And right there and there,
two souls collided into a glorious explosion,
sliding to the grip of the claws of the night
on the way to the familiar road
of sins, misery, and scenic memories

 

After two nights of flying ballistics
and crippling thoughts once abandoned,
Two hearts soon mixed
into a sparkling August poison
A blue bourgeois Libra
And a yellow-bleeding Leo
A pair of delicate, diamond hearts
Defying fate, seeking Cupid's darts
Rising from the dead,
Rising from ash
Rising for the words once left unsaid

 

The thrill of it all is eating me whole 
I feel the shaking ground and the cold air blows
Omens, cautions, and warnings 
Red lights above us all blaring
A whirlwind romance, friends say,
is bound for doom and eventual fade
But his words are enough to hold on to
Words that make my demons fade into view
along with my bad past as I start anew
Away from the dark clouds 
that have crippled me.

Author's Notes/Comments: 

A poem about a whirlwind romance.

allets's picture

Where Is Davos City?

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And why did you stop posting? Welcome back. The old names seem to drift in and out periodically. Your imagery has grown tremendously. Suggeste" claws grip the night" or as claws gripped the night"  and get rid of both "of"s. Tight imagery. How about just "two nights of ballistics". - Stella Louise


 

 

ginsywilde's picture

Thank you! I've also read you

Thank you! I've also read you message. I will really look into this one. :) Anyway, it's Davao City, not Davos hehe. Davao City is in the Philippines. I'm a Filipino. :)

Miiranda31's picture

:D <3 So Beautiful. I love

:D <3 So Beautiful.

I love the details.

The marlboro lights,

the libra and leo (good mix)

cosmos

romance

love this 

Great job!

ginsywilde's picture

Thank you!! I'm really glad

Thank you!! I'm really glad you liked it. This really means so much to me. I hope to read more of you, too!

SSmoothie's picture

Well the vibe is great and

Well the vibe is great and lyrical nature of the poem until a couple of clunky lines " the grip of the claws of the night" needs reworking perhaps its the two 'of' in the sentence or claws dont harmonise with the mood as much as into the talons of the night... 


Then the next lines: after two nights of flying  ballistics 

Doesnt work pernaps verbal balistics sexual ballistics jealous ballistics  it needs more feathering or meshing 

The rest as far as these types of poems go is exceptional. 


Congrats ss 


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ginsywilde's picture

Thank you very much for

Thank you very much for taking the time to read and give me feedbacks. This means much to me, to enable me to grow as a poet. :) I will look into it later after work and maybe edit those parts. Thank you again!

Belle's picture

Hmm... I really well told

Hmm... I really well told story here ;) drowning and... Contagious 

ginsywilde's picture

Thank You!

Thank you very much! I'm glad you liked it. :)