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A Selfish Prayer for Eternal Life
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Existential Now
I lay me down to sleep
Lord
I pray you swear to me
God
That this lost soul will keep
Please
For just one more morrow
Let
The sun shine anew for
Me
Then I will rise up to
Live
To breathe in this world just
One
More time again and once
More
I will give praise to your
Day
And love to you always
06/15/00
Amy Riberdy
Amy, I don't see this as a selfish Prayer, but as a beautiful soul asking God for more time... Very beautiful write and very unique as well...
Peace and Love...
Judy
I love this poem a lot. I haven't seen anyone write a poem within a poem before and never realize it was feasible. I don't think anyone could pull it off like you did. I can't commend you enough on this. I hope to see this poem published in a book one day and go placess because it has that much talent in it. God bless you, Amy.
I am glad I realized that there was a poem within a poem in here, before reading your comment at the end... doesn't make me feel like such an amature after all. :)
I love the style and structe, it is very unique and creative. The title was just the perfect touch to complete this masterpiece.
A very well worked use of form and emotion. I know you can write similar to this, but I would hope you needn't. Although as I say to Wild Bill.M, it all makes a good story.
Give yourself you, that is all I have seen through the year(s), yes years.
;-) RE.
Well-composed and thought-provoking. Thanks for sharing this poem.
Great work.
It's a very well-structured poem It's fabulous... alice
This is a very beautiful poem, it brings such warmth when read. Very creative too.
WOW- this one's really good. Besides the power of the phrase "please let me live one more day", I like how you made sure that the short lines were integral to the larger poem- i.e., how "Let the sun shine anew for Me" is not just a poem interrupted by random short lines, but are semantically incorporated into the poem.
Very nice, indeed. Thoroughly enjoyed this poem.
Hi Amy Yet another good poem by you. I just loved it. A message indeed for all of us. Thanks!!!! Cya Roz
This is really cute, both messages, smart idea!
This form of prayer is an old one. Seems the big thing with religions was trying to find a way to keep faith without compromising to politics and unwarranted persecution through political realms... Ok...this is probably more than you need. This is a very nice piece, noteworthy. Thank you for sharing. Deborah
Every moment is special isn't it, and every extra day we have is like a divine gift, even though many of us take them for granted. Brilliant.
beautiful and haunting.
Wowow!!...this is sooooo good! Wat a wonderful way of writing poetry...OHyes Amy u re one of my best loved here...Words now is not enough to express how much this poem has struck me... but believe me, it struck me real deep!!! Simply superb!!!
this is just about one of the most beautiful poems that i have ever had the privilage to read.... makes the soul feel good.... take care and keep them coming...:O)