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Sacred Warrior
Sacred Warrior of my heart
Where are you now
You leave me alone
Dreaming of the day
When you will walk into my life
And look into my eyes
Enter my soul and join with mine
I feel your presence is close by
My heart has been crying for a long time
Come mend my sacred circle and fill it with love
I long for your touch and warm embrace
Two souls united and eternal grace
Of love created in the heart of Great Spirit
Come find me now I await
My Heart My Soul My Sacred Mate
On the whole, pretty good combination of poetic/prose lines. Could use a few nuts and bolts, i.e., punctuation; a bit more word imagery. Try "playing" a little more with the meter as well as words; that should give this all the punch it needs. The following lines deliver some of the best poetic imagery:
[bold]I long for your touch and warm embrace
Two souls united and eternal grace/
Of love created in the heart of Great Spirit[/bold]=Good line break between "grace" and "of love".
And the lines below deliver some exquisite romantic imagery:
[bold]Come find me now I await
My Heart My Soul My Sacred Mate[/bold]=This just took my breath away. I had to breathe in slowly, then let it out, just to feel the full potential of the above lines.
Keep writing, stay strong.
Ms. Fran Hinkle, a.k.a. Anti