She read an inch and a half too long.
Went beyond its signature and ending.
Saw the invisible line
Below the poem, the sonnet.
The invisible phrase
Past the ending.
She read an inch and a half beyond
Saw the void of empty page
His dash of initals
The sign off in florish
The pen dot
In finale
Maybe she can graphite the space beyond
Search for the hidden agenda
Pencil point on its side
Like a detective in clever tales
Revealing the killer
In the closing scene
But she's not, clever or conniving
Nor totally convinced (of words not spoken)
So she takes the number 2
And beautifully composes
I love you, I love you
I really do.
All my Love
~ dot.
Author's Notes/Comments:
There is always in these situations something unsaid. We all keep things to ourselves. That is what is in the inch and a half beyond the last line.
Is he trying to say goodbye and she won't see it or is he afraid to show his feeling to avoid a complicated relationship. (Distance, no money, busy work/no work) Is he soft pedaling the relationship, just giving her enough cuz he likes her, trying really to avoid hurting her but not able to give up the drug that is she. Needing to be unencumbered so he can be the tortured soul he think he is, and probably is.
Alternative ending:
But she's not, clever or conniving
Nor totally convinced (of words not spoken)
So she takes the number 2
Craftily composes
I love you , I love you
I really do
But I really can't stand you
So I bid you
Adieu
dash dot period
~ !
Read this one as well
The love letter comes
A poem written in request
"Write me a poem," beguilingly
she asks.
She wants to be there
in the mind of her
love, rhyming in rhythm'
the cadence of love, on his
tongue, on his cortex.
Its short and its sweet
of the earth bound roots
of a woman's soul and
her mountains
that he climbed, and sighed. But,
she thinks the thought
of many before, "What more
would he say," what is it
she would see,
in that inch and a half
beyond
the last line.
I like
The alternate ending,but you choose by your own heart!
stay strong,Koko
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Funny
The Director (to whom this is addressed) suggested the first because the second is in the sub text? Not sure what he means. Take a vote.
One and a half inches
Is just too close to the screen.
hes probably wishin n hopin'
and either married or too faraway.
easier to do fantasy by typing it
than to actually meet in real time
in real time, they weren't what I was after.
slim pickings these days,but hope lives on.
nice write,my friend!l
keep dream -& writin,
Koko
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Thanks for the read
Not married but far away at this moment. Not wanting me to put my life on hold for him. I don't think its so he can pursue others intentionally but so he can make life choice without encumbrances. Selfish but also generous because he takes a chance of losing me, which would be painful for him. A strong chance of losing me. He is everything he said he was. I have had the misfortune to meet those that werent what I was seeking.
But what I wanted to see in that unwritten space was a profession of love, or an admission callous disregard. There is always in these situations something unsaid. We all keep things to ourselves. That is what is in the inch and a half beyond the last line.
Yes
im sorry for your situation.
you are too good a woman to not move on.
his loss ,don't hang on to a man who can't commit.
prayers for you
Koko~
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Makes for good Fodder
Thank you for your prayers. I am planning to not hang on. I plan to have many irons in the fire but this man was like memory foam when we first hugged. Someone that I never argued with, disagreements were misunderstandings. He didnt make me feel small, listened to my contributions to his projects, read my poetry, thought I was cool. If we are never lovers again I will hang on to him as a friend.
Yes
That's best if possible
i have if its been allowed by them.
love and forgiveness frees us
Koko~
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You sound
You sound as if you have some personal pains you are working on as well.
"if its been allowed by them"
Love and forgiveness does free us.
I'll keep you in my prayers as well
~D.
Everyone
has something painful,right now ,
i have cleared out all painful past,moving on.
it can make a person sick to not let go!
some past love relationships moved on,a few remained friends to death.
my policy love remains.FRIENDS
Death by suicide stole my main man from me. It's complicated.
i may write it out yet,not ready yet,however.
i witnessed that. Scarred? Well yeah!
and even that leaves one to need to forgive and move on.
Carl and I had one disagreement in twelve years and that was bliss.
we were inseparable so solo was a shock a curse that I had to turn around.
FINALLY,IVE MOVED ON.
HUGS AND PRAYERS
you are young, much ahead for you.
Koko-~
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Not so Young
At 61 I feel my age but rejoice in it.
My condolences to your loss of Carl.
So many layers of feeling in suicide.
I could say the same as my main man.
Earl passed away 2 years ago this weekend. We were together 10.
I found him after an apparent heart attack. Its complicated as well.
I'm moving slowly on but he is still in the room at times.
With these sudden deathe, your core of life is gone and theres an untethered "freedom" of the future thats frightening like hanging in space.
Thank you for revealing your pain, I am glad you have moved on.
I tend to hang on to emotions and feeling not to a point of sickness but as nostalgia
Fprward looking Right
Thanks again
Take care.
Debbie
Debbie
Nostalgia= melancholy mire
thinking above is key
i have almost died from his shooting himself in our bed.
ive been through other stuff and a lot of itBut this was a killer.
im moving on by thinking outside the reality sucks box.
thinking above all of the pain I've seen and am still enduring.
thats the key to happy and content.
we all begin over again sometimes.
im so sorry for your loss!God knows I am.
hugs message me if u like
Koko~
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Thank you
Thank you for sharing. Sure puts everything into perspective. Reality sucks box
Message me as well.
Debbie
Sacred Space
just at the end
begins a great pause
where there is room
for feeling what
came before.
.
an inch and one half
is sufficient to weep
or sigh, moan, groan,
or snicker.
.
this void is no void,
no vacuum. here
is area for open use,
for poets, yes. for
readers emoting, yes!
.
~ allets ~
06-15-16
1156 a
Wise reply poem
Stella!
she who gives,shall also receive.
hugs
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Rewrite
I rewrote the poem Lady A. Take a look and see what you think. I took it from note status to poetry. You emote the perfect sentiment in your remarks/poem. Thank you for the consideration.
~D
Yes
You get it. If you have time Please read the poem An Inch and a Half that these lines are the notes for.
Reread Both of The Poems
The poet makes choices. Keep/pitch, add a word or line. If it says what you feel, then u r ready to move on to next write. The poet chooses. ~A~
The poet chooses
Most certainly the poet should choose. She chooses the 1st because the second is contrived. Thanks for your input.