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This is Mental War.
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Upon every diminishing factor around us
War on life
War on the actions comprising our life
War on our emotions enveloping our actions
War on our love
War on our spirit
War on our expectations
A war against the colorless
odorless
generic
conformity surrounding your fire
Don't reign anything in
Don't succumb to anything less than your capabilities
Reminisce backward, but evolve forward
Think deeply, with purpose
Provide meaning, and rationale
but don't over-evaluate to the point of paralysis
React boldly, and exude passion on command
Love freely
Love everything you see fit to love
consensually
without anxiety, without doubt
without answers
without the word 'no'
with the puzzle pieces missing from the box
with the radiation unphased by sunblock
care when they won't
when red eyes downward stare
be aware
be alive
be there
be here.
Just Re-Read This Art
This is one fine piece of writing. - allets
thank you :)
thank you :)
Well done
Masterful poem
much thanks :)
much thanks :)
If only we all could see it
If only we all could see it and do something about it
Don't let any one shake your dream stars from your eyes, lest your soul Come away with them! -SS
"Well, it's love, but not as we know it."
IMO
best thing we can try to do is become as self-aware as possible for ourseives and for others we love. Knowledge provides context and helps mitigate the uncertainties we all endure. But yea, even that isn't enough sometimes...either way, thank you for the feedback, take care
Exceptional Last Line!
It is a good feeling to read something not sappy or overstated; this was well balanced and quite calming. :D
I admit I deal with bouts of
I admit I deal with bouts of acquiring, then quickly losing the spark to write in a given moment...so the way I try to counter that sometimes is to really throw everything (like this one) down in 10 minutes or less, then I may come back to it in the future and flesh things out. Haven't returned to this one yet, so there's definitely ..what i interpret to be a feeling of acute immediacy..which kinda eliminates the ability to overthink, or overstate, as you mentioned. But I appreciate the feedback of course, maybe I'll leave it alone after all? Thanks again
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"fleshing it out" in another series of poems. I know about not writing for a while - I'm almost there. The 365 poem a day challenge is buring creative synapses - stretching. Alas, we have previous writes of yours to keep us company until the fleshing begins. Be well and have peace, you. :D ~Lady A~
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thank you for sticking around
thank you for sticking around during my dry spells, take care :)
Off To Read deepblue
whenever I see you stop by, I read a a few. - slc
whenever you comment, I look
whenever you comment, I look to improve upon what I wrote, thanks :)
I'm Screamin' Ovah He-ah
"...consentually
without anxiety..."
See, real lines that make the reader feel as they must. Bravo! - slc
I just added 'consentually'
I just added 'consentually' to that line a few days ago...I felt the line gave off the wrong vibe without it being included, thank you for noticing :)