Grandma

 

She kept her favorite candle alight

unsparingly. Twas an heirloom and

she knew it would eventually die, 

 

just like grandma who bestowed it.

 

She figured since the memories

still reigned strong, the candle made

romantic melancholy a good song.

 

Grandma was strange, she thought,

in old age seeming rather distraught,

wearing her white hair curly enough,

and the lipstick smears and sneers.

 

The candle flickers images on the walls

of visiting her house being south

in the wintertime; stories and stories

of what it was like in distant times.

 

But enough, we can only know

just a little because sleepytime beckons.

 

I wish to be left alone. Only my own

reveries have power to whisper

the coffin's bittersweet dreams. Please.

 

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allets's picture

Time To Write The Novel

Here, such prosaic clarity and skill-woven progressions, emotive weight that carries the reader deeper inside each motif present to past. Enjoyed - wished for the opening chapter to  continue. You have a book or three in you, Beeble. :D




 


 

 

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would certainly like to think

would certainly like to think so, but it's difficult enough to create just a few decent stanzas. A novel is tremendously daunting -- yet a dream.


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patriciajj's picture

There is a monumental story

There is a monumental story behind the portrait you so expertly paint of a life obviously well lived to be loved this much. The granddaughter seems to be mourning not only the loss of her grandmother's life, but who the loved one was before old age transformed her into a "strange", "distraught" personality. 

 

With atmosphere and powerful details that bring her to life, you succeeded in evoking a feeling of haunting, pensive grief. A remarkable study of the human experience. 

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You have a third-eye for good

You have a third-eye for good insight. Thanks a bunch.


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