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I saw my killer beyond my grave

      I'm in an open field.

      All I see is stones

      with words on them.

     I stare at

     an unusual one.

  It said R.I.P

and my name was on it.

Then it sturcked me I was Dead.

But how?

Someone walked to my grave'

" I told you I never get caught"

I was murdered.

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last updated 1 February 2014 - 11:48pm
©31 January 2014 - 10:42pm — Christina16
1 February 2014 - 1:47pm — a.griffiths57
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    Your poem is certainly

 

 

Your poem is certainly morbid even eerie. I wanted to hear more about the visitor to the grave, were they repentant or what? Interesting poem. 

 

 

http://www.postpoems.org/authours/a.griffiths57

31 January 2014 - 11:38pm — joshie
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epic poem

epic poem

31 January 2014 - 11:32pm — ramonathompsont
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Creepy

Creepy

31 January 2014 - 11:02pm — Muin
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Well.... Precisely

Well....

Precisely put...

Differenr style....

But you might want to change gave to grave as the poem is related in your poem title...

( its okay)

 

 

Blessings...

And i hope you post more poems and be read by a lot of people.... Good luck

1 February 2014 - 11:50pm — Christina16
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thanks

Thanks all the replys I get and critism means alot to me since I am still only in high school