Don’t forget for you were enlightened
When nerves tempt over the serpent doth grin
Thy thoughts a tempest – The snake a storm
Clouds shall enthrall, safeguard your core
The venom it taints your mind the fruit
That monotonous song so stoically shall leer
Your thoughts constrain, Satan 'tis ever near
The sea ahead too deep, destruction creeps rear

Hark! You were trained - so have not fear
Breath deep - be lax, the sea hath split
Fit but formless - flowing - adapting like water
Your foe he chants, strike as a metronome
You’ll relish in victory, a David amongst Goliaths
So forget all dear partisan, for you are enlightened

Author's Notes/Comments: 

First poem, please critique. Intend on making more martial arts poems for a journal.

Morningglory's picture

I liked it. It took me on a

I liked it. It took me on a ride through my imagination.

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BruceXLeeroy's picture

Thanks, I'm glad you liked

Thanks, I'm glad you liked it.

Astral_Tides's picture

I found this to be quite

I found this to be quite brilliant and exotic as a poem.
The art of combat on a personal level is very enjoyable to me.
Like a game of chess upon a 3 dimensional board.
An art form that speaks to ever mans primal instincts of survival.
Great job!

"The stars awaken a certain reverence, because though always present, they are inaccessible; but all natural objects make a kindred impression, when the mind is open to their influence." R.W.E.



BruceXLeeroy's picture


Much appreciated, I like the analogy to a chess game. I am a practicing Hapkidoist but like to look at martial arts on a broad scale. I will write a few more poems on combat and the heart of the warrior for my martial arts journal.

Not_A_Somalian_Guy's picture

First of all ... A wonderful

First of all ... A wonderful thing that you are focusing on the literary aspects that a martial system naturally provides.

Secondly, a state of Zen .. or as in this case a state of no-mindedness , the warrior ( artist ) is impartial to any extremes of emotion be it joy, anger, relief, fear .. It's Just like a free flowing water ... Subtle, eternal and yet adapting to where it flows. I can understand the 'relish in victory' aspect although since this poem is about 'Mushin' I thought it was a wee bit not in sync with the concept .. ( but maybe that's just me ) .

Incidentally .. Have had a slight amateur training in Kalaripayattu .. and ancient martial art practiced in India although thankfully have never been in any position to demonstrate it physically ..

He who knoweth himself ... knoweth the world ....

BruceXLeeroy's picture

Kalaripayattu, extremely rare

Kalaripayattu, extremely rare in the United States... In retrospect, most of the second half of this poem was not technically in sync with the concept of mushin. I'll do a better job of savoring the themes of my poems in the future. Thanks!

allets's picture

If A Tree Falls a forest and Confucious goes on a journey, will the mantra survive the repetition of forms - or will karma and dharma fight on the plane of an existential dramatic dream of thy(s)? The koan will take years - Lady A