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Mental sublimation,

erogenous immersion,

delicious sensations,

sublime visions,

each flare and fade,

and blind choices 

are made.

 
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last updated 12 September 2014 - 7:37pm
©27 March 2014 - 10:35am — Beavis
1 April 2014 - 2:03pm — running_with_rabbits
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hmmmm

most of the poem feels like awkward words slammed together to confuse me, but then the last two lines come up, and it all seems perfectly combined to be profound...blind choices are made...

Much Love

Ashley

17 May 2014 - 11:30am — Beavis
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:-D

This was an old snippet in my notebook that I found & finished. From your description, I think I succeeded in my objective. It may not be great, but it is complete and, to my eyes, effective for what is trying to convey;-)

23 May 2014 - 4:03pm — running_with_rabbits
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...

I think that's what makes it great no?

Much Love

Ashley

22 September 2014 - 3:43pm — allets
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Yes

The simplicity, like Haiku, makes it successful and it conveys (most likely) more than the poet intended - Lady A

 

 

 

26 September 2014 - 4:39am — Beavis
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;-)

Thanks Lady A! This one has haunted me and refused to go away. I don't know if it's just stubbornness or that it I found something new whenever I crawled back in bed with it! ;-)

15 October 2021 - 1:09am — allets
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I Am Making More Decisions Lately

Choices are relegated to which birthday card to buy, what to cook, how much floor to vac/sweep. The rest is reading and writing. or where to visit again. Went ti John King Books yesterday - been choosing to go since 1968. Sci-fi of course.