Love So Tangible

I've never felt love so tangibly,

Encircling my body like an aura.

I'll love you for all eternity.

Your subtle touch keeps me whole.

 

In twenty two years of my life,

A lifetime spent searching for you,

I've never met a man so sweet

Or felt a love so true.

 

I refuse to believe I met you

Less than two months ago.

Already I can't live without you

As if you've stolen my soul.

 

The love I feel for you

Dances along my skin.

It encircles my body

Like rings of smoke

And then scorches my heart.

 

The love I feel for you

Sculpts time as love sees fit.

All my life before you

Is eternity very ill-spent,

A lifetime hollow and unkempt.

Author's Notes/Comments: 

An old love poem for my ex husband.  HA!!!

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running_with_rabbits's picture

:?

ex husbands... oh the things which can be said about ex-husbands...

 


Much Love

Ashley

and_hera_met_zeus's picture

i can see

that i've unintenionally opened a can of worms here.... lol

running_with_rabbits's picture

naaaaah

Pandora did that! you're just assembling the aftermath....


Much Love

Ashley

and_hera_met_zeus's picture

hahaha!!!!

good answer!!

KindredSpirit's picture

Wow

You are a popular girl.

56 reads--- it's crazy

You put this out on my Anniversary.

KS

and_hera_met_zeus's picture

in this case,

i don't think it's me.  i think "a love poem for an ex spouse" got everyone interested.  i think it's a popular subject because a lot of people have something to contribute.

AquarianMale's picture

Overall I liked this poem.

Overall I liked this poem. There are some lovely images. The 4 line, 4 line, 4 line, then 5 line stanzas (with shorter lines) appear a little loose and irregular, but then again, that is the nature of free verse as it flows to the poet's own emotions. You use "encircling my body" in the first stanza, and then "encircles my body" in the fourth. This makes the repetition not contribute anything to the poem. Personally, I feel this poem (although good) has much greater potential, although I enjoyed it nonetheless. Thank you.  

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i' glad you pointed that out.

the repetition there was not intentional, in that case it was accidental (though i do employ intentional repetition in other poems, i also accidentally repeat words all the time, and usually i catch them when i edit).  i wrote this 12 years ago, so it's too late to change it.  i hope my poetry has improved since then!!! thanks for the insightful, thoughtful critique.  the only way to improve is to recognize your mistakes.

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2 months... figures lol,

2 months... figures lol, sounds like a twin flame union. Caused a lot of trouble I suspect! :) beautiful write. 


Don't let any one shake your dream stars from your eyes, lest your soul Come away with them! -SS    

"Well, it's life SIMS, but not as we know it" - ¡$&am

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yeah lol!!

i DO think he and i were soulmates... but not the twin flame kind.  we were the "lets keep repeating this mistake in every life until we get it right" kind of soulmate.  and i think we finally did, because based on how it ended, i think the only goal was to spend the time together without murdering eachother.  

KindredSpirit's picture

When ever it may be

I Love the way 

You write.

KS

and_hera_met_zeus's picture

thanks :)

i like the poem, too.  :) the ex husband..... not so much.  ha ha :) its been long enough now that i can look back on it all and not hurt even a little.

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Ode To My Ex

 

I'm just messin' with you

because it's been a long time since

you messed up and decided to stay,

but I made you go away and now

I feel less than nothing when I hear

your name.

.

Now here you are being seen, looking

like there is something for you over here.

Here? Ha!. Uh uh. Just keep steppin'

because you know I no longer

cringe when I think of you, which is rarely.

My heart is fine, thanks for asking.

We have a choice to make: either you

go now or I have to go now. Breathing

the same air that has passed through you

makes me nausious.

.

I do not miss you. In fact the pain I

lived with when you left no longer lives

here. I wish you as much harm as chance

can bring your way. May you die in agony.

Sincerely, your much happier Ex.

.

Stella L. Crews

10-24-15

556p

 

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and_hera_met_zeus's picture

i love it!!!!

a perfect follow up poem!!! "may you die in agony."  LOVE IT!!!

allets's picture

I'm Getting Over Writing Fatigue

venting helps - say it, then say it more, then just tell all - then deny it - ah to poet is to lie a lot. Gld u liked the reply poem, I felt the need to hang fire.

~(:D)-   ~Stella~

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well, get well soon!!!!

i hate to see you struggling, especially since you make writing look so effortless most of the time.