the edge

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Hyacinth garden

 

toward night’s design

dense with promising deception

upon the edge

a labyrinth
of risk

with needs

a prelude
to pursuit


hushed pledge

eludes

lips
eclipsed
before they

slide

into the surge

of surrender

 

ceaseless source
cadence of breath
glossy folds
flow
hot
drenched and desirous...

at last

salty slash complete
yield and reveal a refuge

in caress of soft secrets

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SSmoothie's picture

Gorgoeus! Completely gorgeous

Gorgoeus! Completely gorgeous except for that one word which in my mind brings it to vulgarity the word slash aflyer salty... Other than that par Excellence one of your finest! Take me!!!!! ;) hugss


Don't let any one shake your dream stars from your eyes, lest your soul Come away with them! -SS    

"Well, it's life SIMS, but not as we know it" - ¡$&am

9inety's picture

Hmmm

this is a bit of a quandary, I could edit that word out but then, the poem would not be as "edgy" what to do, what to do???

 

any suggestions?

anyone?

 

Peace

Dylan


"One of the best results of life, is the torment of love"

Dylan Eliot

nightlight1220's picture

*kneels with bowed

*kneels with bowed head*

.....


...and he asked her, "do you write poetry? Because I feel as if I am the ink that flows from your quill."

"No", she replied, "but I have experienced it. "

 

bishu's picture

You never fail to surprise Sir

You never fail to surprise Sir.I oft feel your words.


©bishu 

 

Diamond_Wills_New_War's picture

Incredible flow and wording

Incredible flow and wording this poem is superb.


Long days and pleasant nights

Diamond

SSmoothie's picture

Yes very wet diamond ;) 

Yes very wet diamond ;) 


Don't let any one shake your dream stars from your eyes, lest your soul Come away with them! -SS    

"Well, it's life SIMS, but not as we know it" - ¡$&am