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Crimson Desire
He appeared before me.
I knew I should run
That I should flee
But his mesmerizing gaze held me bound under his spell
I was trapped,
Drowning in the inky blackness of his eyes
Without realizing what had happened
I was backed up against the hard, inflexible wall
He took a step closer
His eyes devoured my body
I could feel heat radiating from his body
As he liked his lips, my throat went dry
Scorching my delicate skin through layers of petticoats
I was lost.
The flames of desire stole my breath away
As anticipation welled up within me
I was lost in the fierceness of his kiss
His unyielding body supporting mine
As his hands splayed over my back
His tongue ravished my mouth
Storming the castle of my innocence
Aggressively pursuing his eventual conquest
His hands moved lower
Searing my core
Feasting on the forbidden fruit of my desire.
Good line...
"Scorching my delicate skin through layers of petticoats
I was lost."
I really like this... I like how you leave the sensuality to the imagination but still give enough detail. You're a really good writer. Keep it up! And thanks for the comment on my poem "Dark Art." I'm in the process of putting all my poems up; right now it's mostly my newest ones. I’m trying to become a better writer so any feedback you can give me is really appreciated, thank,! I am putting your page on my favorites. ;)
I love this poem. It graphically and visually paints what is occuring without the sheer graphic detail itself.
wow i really liked this one you are an amazing writer and you really should keep doing it I've never read anything like this one before and it is so great....
Intensely beautiful and erotic!
Starward
This made me think of vampires. I dont know if it is meant to be so, but i really liked how you captured the girls inner fight.
very exciting, and "exceptionally well written"
I had to take a cold shower!
In the future, please put a rating on your poems ("R", or PG13)
so I know what to expect before I read them.